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Sand Castles |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Sand Castles When I was young. I played at the ocean's shore. Built my castles, ebb tide. When the sand was still wet. When I was young I expunged time, Into gleaming silver gold. A pile of silicon. When I was young. Phantoms bide and trumpets blared. I challenged the sea with pride. No tide could fall these walls. Now I am old Waters splayed the shore. And the castles are no more. But the pail and shovel stayed. |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
A good friend told me that reading you is like a daily shower, you can't help but feel refreshed afterwards. She is right... Thank you! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Soleil Noir, A delightful comment, I thank you,  |
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Hypnosis Member
since 2001-12-02
Posts 325CO |
Yes being young is a great time in our lives, where we can live care free, and take on the world. However as we get older we have more responsibilities and such joyfullness is lost, something that I am moving through right now in my life. I thought this was a great poem, good job! Randy Meador a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
So lets go diggin for clams baby ... LOL Look at me Stinky playing with poetry  free verse and sands of wisdom ... any one ever tell ya that you are deep? *L* any one ever tell ya that you are cool? *wink* I gots a new sandbox...bring that shovel and pail we will bury Randy in the sand LOL  meI ask why you come here, you say just because |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Soooooo well said, sweet friend, we may be grown up now, but the spirit of innocence and the children of God we are will always shine deep in our hearts and we will always be building sand castles through the love we share! (big hugggssssss) I love it, sweet friend, your words are always so delightful and edifying to us all! We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Sy, your pail is always full, ready to make yet more sand castles. If your shovel ever breaks, just give me a call, and I will bring a new one...promise! The hope you leave is why sandcastles will be perpetual in time...no matter how many waves lap the shore...you will be our ever-more... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Randy, True and a big thank you. JM, What a wonderful idea. I'll fly Randy to the beach and we'll bury him together. LOL  Noah, All true and thank you. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, Who can resist your warm light. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Seymour - this is wonderful. You will understand why I keep my grandson's pail and shovel that I bought for him, in my garden instead of allowing him to take it home..lol. Bless You. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nightshade, What a wonderful idea. Thank you for the read and wonderful comment. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Lovely Sy..when i was young i didnt write poetry..dont know about you..but i enjoy doing this more than anything else. ~Victoria~ "To love and be loved is to feel the sun from both sides." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Victoria, And you write well thank you *L*. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
A very beautiful piece, Sy. There truly is nothing that is more fun than building a sand castle, except writing poetry. And here, you have done both and displayed them to us very beautifully. I think we are all children at heart.  copyright2001 Lyra Nesius "poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks [This message has been edited by Madame Chipmunk (01-09-2002 11:18 AM).] |
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wolf Junior Member
since 2002-01-04
Posts 10Hamilton (Steeltown) |
A very insightful reflection of life past and present. Excellent. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I built my first sandcastle about 2 years ago, at least I made it to the shore! Kathleen-- |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful Sy...makes me want to run for the nearest sand dune...sit up there and watch the children playing....or better yet, join them! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~ |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, and then I became old enough to rebuild the castles for my own enjoyment and dreams, knowing that nothing is of permanence except the waves of continuing time...very nice write, Sy, enjoyed it..gentle smile |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
how beautiful penned, I like the depth within. Thank you for sharing your beautiful thoughts. Charisma |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Madame C, A beautiful reply, thank you. Wolf, Thank you for the excellent. Kathleen, Good for you. *L* Nancy, Next time you are there do just that. *L* Charisma, It's a pleasure to share them with you. *L* |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Oh seymore, great memories here. loved this so much. floria |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Floria, Thank you so much, |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* come sit with me upon the shore of our eternal youth and build sand castles that will never wash away....I love this. It brought back memories with deep yearning. *sigh* how I miss the beaches I used to walk. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
I like this. The formula of first lines sets up the last line very well. The use of an image to convey the thought of playfullness and youthfulness is really and effective tool and you used it very well. The simplicity of the picture just adds to its power. Good job! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Startime, Thank you, Canuckster, Wonderful critique, thank you. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Sy, I say we keep building castles of dreams Maybe one of them will be permanent. Very effective poem Sandra |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sandra, |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Sy, this is insightful and very well expressed...as always you make me think and your poetry moves me. You are a great talent! Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
My mind still builds those sandcastles, even though I am far away from sandy beaches. Thank you for transporting me to temporal playcastles for a few moments. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Now I am old Waters splayed the shore. And the castles are no more. But the pail and shovel stayed""" OH what a wonderful Image to see....I can see the water, sand, and pale and shovel....this is wonderful...thank you for the vivid scene... Lauren~ Tomorrow's another day |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Melissa, Thank you sweet. Midnitesun, Glad I could transport you for the moment. *L* Greeneyes, Thank you for the vivid answer. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Over the past several years, I've read so many wonderful words from your pen. I always expect excellence... sometimes, I find awe. *S* This is one of those times... I love this! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suthern, |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy--A wonderful build up to those last lines..that hit the heart strings of "I know". Much enjoyed! |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Another very interesting read, Sy. You have so many messages in your poetry. Deep. |
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