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The Other Lover... |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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My wife is having an affair. The evidence is everywhere. Her face is rosy with delight. A smile upturns her lips at night. A special twinkle in her eye I spot, as she goes passing by. Her thoughts, a million miles away, She barely hears a word I say. Though I am crushed, I cannot claim To not know wherein lies the blame. There was a time, long years ago, That I was quite the Romeo. I brought her flowers every day. I smiled at what she had to say. I always tried to make her see The happy man she let me be. I made her laugh with silly quips And took her on romantic trips That made her squeal with delight. I held her to me every night. But, as the years passed frantically, Romance came not so easily. The mounting pressures of my life - The work, the bills - no time for wife. Bouquets delivered less and less As did the times of tenderness; My smile appeared less frequently And changed the man that once was me. Now I can see, she has another Man to be a better lover. Though I still play a vital part, He is the one inside her heart. She loves another man, and yet, I sadly feel no regret. Her other lover is, you see, The husband that I used to be. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM  haathats if YOU are the lover you are talking about at the end of the poem..not sure after reading again?? ~Vic "To love and be loved is to feel the sun from both sides." ~ David Viscott [This message has been edited by Victoria (01-06-2002 12:24 AM).] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
'Deer dear heart This is one of my new favourites, how true this is. I can see so many people nodding their heads to this. How often do we take for granted what we have and let it slip away? Well, this should be pinned to a lot of cork boards. Absolutely excellent writing as always but something more, it's that knowledge that this is real that lifts this into the masterclass. You do know I love this don't you? I thought I might have dropped a hint of two   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Never blame yourself, sweet friend, you always do all you can to be the most loving lover you can be, and you do all you can to support her and your family always. (sad sigh) I know how you feel, but you are truly a wonderful friend and person and we would all be ever so lucky to love just like you do as your loving words say! (big hugggssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is so sad but beautiful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
'deer...Me thinks that I know the moral to this story well...No, she doesn't have a lover (I think?)...kidding...but I know I have done that before...That is one area of my life that I am working harder at now. You penned this extremely well...could not have said it better... Thanx.. [This message has been edited by Magnus (01-06-2002 01:00 AM).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Oh, I know this is a serious issue, but I am so worried about poor Noah, the boy is going to be worried about you all night long! Kathleen-- |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
that was cool...wow... hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
And such is love is it not? Good one my "deer" ~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You never fail to leave behind a bit of wisdom in all you write...more, please? |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
I'm sure you can get back in the competition.. just read her this poem!!! To say I loved it seems not quite enough.. but it will have to do as I silently stand and applaud the wisdom of your heart. Most impressive.. as always...  Pepper |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Deer, Have I heard these words before? they ring just as true now as they did in my imagination,... or perhaps yours. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Balladeer, Again? I thought you fixed that problem!  |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"She loves another man, and yet, I sadly feel no regret. Her other lover is, you see, The husband that I used to be." Oh, I do love it when you weave such wonderful messages into your poetry Michael. Beautiful closing lines to compliment the rhythmic and flowing lines throughout this tender and thought-filled piece. An excellent write my friend, it made me stop and ponder. Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, I knew you were due for a tuneup.  |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
'Deer - Great words of wisdom here, in that they tell us all something we already know, but don't think about. You are right, as usual. |
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Ladyhawke Member
since 2001-09-01
Posts 86 |
BRAVO! |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
OH MY GOSH,, I read no other replies but ran down here to answer. this is most magnificent. deep deep feelings expressed. So much love and some sadness. I so love this piece. It is truly magnificent. floria |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
sadly, relating here......but, working on it  |
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Ven Member
since 2001-10-01
Posts 102U.K. |
An excellent poem. Caught me out with that twist in the tale I really didnt see that comming. Very cleverly written piece. |
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Virgo_Rains Member
since 2001-12-03
Posts 54Pacific Northwest, U.S.A. |
Oh how true and sad this happens...I enjoyed this for the lesson..the thoughts..and the turn at the end...Excellent..will be looking for more of your poems! Shelly |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
You had me worried there for a minute..til I got to the last line!! Another compelling story told, as only you can ‘Deer. Whether this is true in your life or not, it is amazing how a stale love can become fresh again when we go back to doing the things we did when it was exciting and new. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
The best lover of all is the one reborn into a relationship. I really like this piece its handworks explodes all over it in a masterpiece of gifted words used in just the right way. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
*Nancy sits staring at the screen, nodding and smiling*....how true 'Deer'...how true. Hugs. ~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~ |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Just don't know what to say to this one, Michael........ except..... Its one masterful piece.  Please keep em coming! copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Well you had best get romancing her again, Balladeer....you don't want her to only be in love with a memory. **big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Oh Balladeer, you had me going there for a minute. Until I got to the end. I love to read your poetry. You are such a good poet. I'll be looking for more. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Thank you all for your kind replies. Yep, I've been there and, from the responses, I'd say a few of you have traveled that same road. Hopefully we all learn from experience...thank you all again, sincerely |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Bravo! You win on both counts! Now get back in there and fight (send flowers, etc) Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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A Tone of Voice Member
since 2001-07-18
Posts 287 |
I like this the way you weaved, and then threw in the punch....WTG~! *S* Atov |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Balladeer, Honey, there are so many people out there feeling this same way...It's amazing how life seems to take over the things that are most important to us....great write! Hugs Cindi |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
You think that "he's" the only one, but a shock I have for you Cuz she's also see'in me And ya didn't have a clue She cut ya down to "once a month" I know you're all "a-tether" But you shouldn't feel so bad Your friends she's cut off all together! |
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