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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you 
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It was in that very moment it was written bold in his eyes storm clouds of darkest grey brewing trying hopelessly to disguise I waited and watched for chance to convey words from my heart wanted desperately to say Maybe it was his pride or perhaps it was my own it doesn’t really matter with the time so quickly flown I thought he might say it I know he thought I’d cry but the only thing I was able to do was smile and say good bye Now the words are choking me as they were left here on tip of tongue when they should have been voiced in some poetic fashion, or gently sung I should have said ‘I love you’ and not gave a damn to consequence I should have said ‘I love you’ and let go of self defense….. ~SEA~ "...and she swears there's nothing wrong |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* sometimes we let our fears dictate too much to us and lose something precious. My heart goes out to you....I know this feeling well. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Susan, You didn't! Really? I don't believe it. I think it's just a poem...a good poem...but just a poem. I love you're poetry but I thought you were always on the otherside of this subject. Surpise. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Nice poem SEA-- I'm with Larry on this one-- you seem to be more of an I did- rather than a I shoulda... enjoyed this There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
A touching poem, maybe just wanting to be more thoughtful when you are already?Nicely done.  |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Circe darling girl YOU do know you're on the Crying List don't you? And if you hadn't made it already you would have made it with this one. Wonderful writing darling girl absolutely wonderful. Now go and read the poem and deliver your punishment. I would give you a time to have it delivered by but I haven't anyone else so it wouldn't be fair However before my birthday would be nice. That's 14 days dearest sister of my heart. Do I love this? YES I Do, does it excuse you? NO it doesn't Good luck with the punishment I suppose you want the link? Okay /pip/Forum53/HTML/000128.html As always Mushy    To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahhh, SEA, for these thoughts can torment with the what ofs, but then again, it is living with the if dids..very gentle smile..A very very good write and read |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes and those moments do arrive if we stick with it...James |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"I should have said ‘I love you’ and not gave a damn to consequence I should have said ‘I love you’ and let go of self defense….." Carpe diem. "It's now or never... Tomorrow may be too late." Remember what the King sang? |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
SEA, I'll have another of your regret concoctions, this one took my breath away. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Darn that old self-defense...but one never knows fully...you listened to the heart in this one, SEA...and you did it proud... |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Susan....you shoulda! Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Now the words are choking me as they were left here on tip of tongue when they should have been voiced in some poetic fashion, or gently sung I should have said ‘I love you’ and not gave a damn to consequence I should have said ‘I love you’ and let go of self defense….. ====================================== aching regret set to rhyme divine.... so sad  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Susan...this is soooo good! Now you know you shoulda let down your defenses. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SEA~ Ohhhhhhhh ... this is poignantly perfect~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh, how often life is full of should haves...sometimes we just have to quit beating ourselves up over what we should have done and try not to make the same mistake twice. I've missed reading yours and other's work here...it's nice to be home, even for a short while |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Awww Sea, this is so sad. We have to try not to think of the "should haves", cause it can surely keep us down. I wish you the best of luck. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Woulda, shoulda, coulda ... it could become our worldwide motto. It never hurts to say "I love you" if you mean it. When I get my heart put back together I will read on ... a wonderfully aching write, gal. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
I've had those moments, and those words can't come out. Great poem. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
SEA, I have always considered you to be a tender hearted person...but the suspense here is killing me. Cough it up, it's just a poem, right? |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssss) Oh Susan, this is so so heataching, I hope all is well with you and you found the chance to express how you feel. (kiss on cheek) So sad but beautiful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
my goodness, I didn't expect this..... ok Larry, quit holding your breath, you know perfectly well, I am a complete sucker for love.....I would be the one to say it, I can't stand the idea of someone not knowing how I feel about them.....regardless of how it might hurt me. There is one from my past, that perhaps this came from...I should have told him, and I didn't. I went back to find him once, to just let him know, and I couldn't find him. It is a regret I'll live with forever. Thank you all for reading, you've made my day!! (happy now Larry? )"...and she swears there's nothing wrong |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Regrets, yes I know about regrets, this was just lovely sea. floria |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
You turned a sad regret into a lovely poem, Sue....at least you've done something constructive with a regret... Thats more than most of us can say. Great job! copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Susan, I knew it...I knew it! Wheh. That's a relief. Thanks...and by the way, a nice poem. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
again, I thank you all for reading and Larry, I knew you knew thank you |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
susan, I just felt this last night, funny, I guess...this is what I needed to read tonight. Thanks. |
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