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militantpoet
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since 2002-02-12

Posts 6
Australia

0 posted 2002-02-12 07:18 PM

Hi, I'm new here. Feel free to say anything about what I write,I always welcome critisism. Oh and I'm Australian, so I don't use Americanised English. Here's a one of my older poems. Thanks.

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Stand politically corrected
The herd rushes assimilation
Blood boils in the heat of burgeoning prejudice
Our future generation
Hardens like steel into long forgotten arms
Punctuated by capsules of youth
Corrupted
Blood thickens into sickly soup
Even as it is formed
Minds develop into cages
Trapped by age-old obsolete eulogies
Caught up in darkness without ever seeing light
Information technology overload
As we seep through the CPU stone age
The shrinking world coagulates into bloodclots

Then some broke free.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2002-02-12 07:48 PM

Welcome to Passions...Very thought provoking first post....I look forward to reading more of your poetry and your responses to our wonderful family of poets!
~Please check your e-mail for a special greeting~

~Nancy Lee~

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

2 posted 2002-02-12 07:51 PM

Welcome militant, this is very well written and I enjoyed your thoughts, look forward to reading more of your work.

floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2002-02-12 08:31 PM

Welcome to Passions! Americanized words or not, it will be nice reading your future offerings, that I can tell all ready! Why do I say so? Some of our best poets are your neighbors, that's why! Enjoy yourself, have fun, check into the rules and guidelines, and write on!

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2002-02-12 08:32 PM

BRAVO!!! Ooohhhhhh...I love it, sweet friend, this is marvelous writing, I LOVE IT!!! Welcome to Passions, sweet Mark, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! (big hugggsssssss) We all love you so so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Mark, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Canuckster
Member

since 2002-01-09

Posts 285
New Mexico, USA

5 posted 2002-02-12 08:48 PM

Very concrete. Very Graphic and very effective in the pictures you paint.

Look forward to seeing more of your work.

never try to teach a pig to sing
it wastes your time AND annoys the pig

militantpoet
New Member

since 2002-02-12

Posts 6
Australia

6 posted 2002-02-12 11:18 PM

thankyou all very much for the warm welcome

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