Open Poetry #18 |
Breast of Winter |
SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
I am sorry when winter wilts shy and leaves us, wondering. Little birds, mid-flight undecided, red berry in cheek and a gun. No squealing lights or snow surrounding, no timber bare, to dress or dream. Little birds, little birds, screaming. Iron tracks hand laid and worn, splitting a forest still waiting in two. For you. For winter holding and the worry. I am sorry. Sorry when spring is unsure, peeking through in yellow too, warmth on a wing in the mood. Or when she’s weeping charcoal and afraid, waiting wary out of winter with a view. Little birds turning - back the tracks again. |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Very descriptive of winter. sky |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Nicely penned! Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Gave me chills. It's good to see you too. Happy Valentines Week. Sandra |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
I love the imagery of this poem...very good...could almost feel the bite of the cold on my skin... J~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A.... For you. For winter holding and the worry. I am sorry. Sorry when spring is unsure, peeking through in yellow too, warmth on a wing in the mood. Sigh.. you are incredible! These four lines made me feel, But your words always make me feel. Thank you. Have missed reading you A This is going into my library. hugs Maree |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
winter has its ways, nicely written |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Great write! Wonderful imagery and feeling here...enjoyed thoroughly. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Love transcends time and space~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
SpitFire, Enjoyed the read. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
SpitFire--You do have a way with words and make a small thing into a picture with feelings attached...a true poet! Peace to you, your wish returned. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Ooohhhhh...such gorgeous imagery fills your words, sweet friend, may the songbirds sing on and on and may spring forever flourish in your heart with cheer! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is gorgeous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
you have that way of touching that part of a person that speaks to the soul. . . just thought that you should know my friend. . . peace to you. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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marya2 Junior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 36 |
excellent, really a wonderful crafting you've done here. I'd like to read more from you, I remember a few from a long time ago but havne't seen you lately. Takes time to write a good poem though, doesn' it? marya |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This has such a forlorn feel...the ending of one thing, the tentative beginnings of another...in life, death, and death feeding all of life... very, Very well done.... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
As a little bird, I felt the terror of being trapped between the threat of being hunted and the uncertainty of the weather....when all I ask for is a dry safe branch, a berry, peace and harmony. Peace to you, sweet poet friend. |
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