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Crying |
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Night_Myst Junior Member
since 2000-08-16
Posts 34River Falls, WI |
Like the ocean on the beach The emptiness erodes my soul My existence Mere echoes of my mind I want to cry out But I stifle the moans I hold back the cascade of tears The darkness closes in I search for a light But I find only emptiness And in the silence I realize I hold back my tears for no one |
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heather_kitn Member
since 2001-12-07
Posts 61In The Kokapelli's Song |
Sad, heartfelt and contemplative. Well done! -heather |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Night_Myst...I like the haunting expression of this poem. So well-written, so well-expressed. ***Ivy Rose |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sad, yet very powerful emotions here. Nicely expressed. All writing comes |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent writing...James |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
You've summed up that feeling very well indeed.. good write. Pepper |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I love how poetry can take sadness and make it beautiful. Your poem is really wonderful. |
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Night_Myst Junior Member
since 2000-08-16
Posts 34River Falls, WI |
Thank you all so much for your response. I didn't know if people would like it. It was based upon a thought that I had one night. I realized that I held back my tears when no one was there. Thanks for the positive response. |
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Maverick Wolf Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 94Scandia, MN |
Good write. Keep your chin up. Things will get brighter. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Wonderful writing and really excellent imagery Well done, very very good writing   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
But I find only emptiness And in the silence I realize I hold back my tears for no one ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Beautifully haunting write. Well done! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Night_Myst - read your words and have been there, in the night, in the mist. Nice write... BC |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) So very sad, sweet friend, I feel this is a feeling we can all incorporate well every now and then! (sigh) Write out your tears if you must, sweet friend, we are always here for you! We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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