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Winter's Green
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Winter's Green |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven 
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1. I want to quit thinking about what I had when I found you, and what we were together. Even more, all the things we didn’t get to see. Mountains that are more than hills, walking beaches where man first flew, the moments just before we would join sea and sun in morning’s first kiss, during our first Atlantic sunrise together. We shared both castles and cabins, we saw rain and sky, black bears huddled in fake rock cages, and fake leopards hugging rocky thighs. We smiled at one and quietly laughed at the other. Together. 2. I didn’t get to see the cool green of my ocean blend into the warm green of your eyes, we didn’t have the music of the beach or a summer moon under which to dance. People would have fun watching us teach each other our favorite dance, we would probably laugh at the way they smiled. What we knew was the cool of late winter, and yet somehow you could see not just potential but beauty in what was there. All of which made you even more beautiful as I caught a small glimpse inside of you, and smiled. I can’t help but want more sometimes- I can see us standing beneath Hatteras' stripes with dawn reflecting in your eyes, as I await the sun's rise from the water to slowly lift my lips from yours, hoping Triolina saw us and smiled. 3. The colors of life are carried in my dreams, and are dominated by shades of green - of growth? Or maybe they represent my unwillingness to give up hope. Green would be a hard color to never see again. I still have a star beside my bed - at night it shares its glowing green and memories of you. Maybe, someday you will return to see how it dimly offers up soft hope. Sometimes green looks almost black - like when the sun goes down and trees begin to blend day into night - until only blackness and, the wait for a new day remain. The sameness of each day without you strips the green from the next, as every tomorrow is a darker shade of today, and in every shadow cast is seen less hope. There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Beautifully written, Jamie, but O, so sad! My heart cries with you, my friend.  -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
It's amazing how such beauty comes out of such sadness...that always amazes me! This is very well presented...I thoroughly enjoyed the read! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Jamie~There are not many poems posted here that have the ability to deeply touch that place within me and reduce me to tears. This one has that ability and produced the tears. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Love transcends time and space~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I know the pain of this one, Jamie. It hit me like a thunderbolt too. I don't know what else to say. sigh. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Jamie... I don't know what to say. Trying for words: This is the most profound, exquisitely-felt piece of poetry you have ever written. I can feel it inside. You know I'll always remember right? I will, all those fuzzy trees, stark against the wintry sky. And how the dogwoods were just starting to bloom...and the Yield signs, and how everything was so unique, and beautiful in its uniqueness... this poem is a gift my friend. Hugs to you,  K |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Silver Streak: Thanks for the compliment and the empathy. ethome: In this case writing about something so beautiful made it easier-- thanks for reading. Enchantress: I am truly flattered. Please accept this tissue along with my thanks. Karen: Sorry 'bout the thunder hon--'specially when you are needing your quiet recovery time from Mardi Gras. We will simply have to sigh together quietly. Kamla: I know you will. Sometimes giving way is so much better than yielding eh? Jhk>lk There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I've read this a couple of times and found it too painful to reply. The love and caring you put into it shows, it's a wonderful poem. But so sad. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Jamie, how do I reply to something so profound. This touched me so deeply that I am speechless. I don't beleive I have read anything more beautiful. hugs dear friend Maree |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jamie-- Written from your heart's pen, therefore exquisite! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Sadly superb and very well said... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Sooooooo beautifully heartaching, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and your tears and I pray with all my heart that she will return and forever make the green of spring blossom in your heart with sunshine and sweet dreams! (BIG HUGGGSSSSS) We all love you so much, sweet friends, my thoughts are with you always! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jamie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Sharon - Glad you finally could- thanks Mmy - How? - the way you just did--heh ; hugs back martie - Thanks for reading and the warm reply Magnus - Thanks Noah- Thanks for the prayers! There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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