Open Poetry #18 |
Possessed |
peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
It surely was not planned I never meant to fall Completely at your mercy With no control at all I never thought I'd feel this way Not after all my past Never dreamed I'd let you by The walls I'd built to last It's much too late for caution Too late to think things through I'm lost in all these feelings In constant thoughts of you Just one word is all it takes You steal my breath away A look, a glance, at last a touch I'm robbed of words to say Possessed by thirst that can't be quenched Desire that can't be slaked I could drink of you my love Forever and a day Pepper |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Pepper....another word is consumed....that and possessed go well together in this case. I have felt those feelings...Sometimes the walls just are not high or strong enough. Very well written and certainly gets the message across...Thank you for sharing this. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Yes...sometimes love can be completely overpowering. Very nice sensuous write. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~ |
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heather_kitn Member
since 2001-12-07
Posts 61In The Kokapelli's Song |
*smiles* Love is only real when caution plays no part. Love isonly real when there are no choices made to fall into it. We do not and cannot define love. Love defines us...and does so differently for each situation. Well written piece! *smiles* -heather |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Thought's come through well, you might like to adjust the meter in the last stanza because of the extra length of line you have there..just a thought |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Sooooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, the magic of love is always so compelling and I can't help but smile always just thinking of how it can make our hearts sing so easily! (kiss on cheek) May true love forever fill your heart, sweet friend, this is gorgeous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lavenia, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Pepper darling girl This is utterly utterly wonderful Oh I've been there, yes possessed, is exactly how it is. No sense no reason, and no judgement. Absolutely fabulous writing. Well done, truly excellent Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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