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N orth Carolina Girl
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0 posted 2002-02-11 09:15 AM


I saw some things today you`re not going to believe.
i saw a mouse chasing a cat around a tree.

While I was walking up the road.
When lo and behold on a rabbit sat a toad.

This is going to be fun I said to myself.
When all of a sudden I heard a cry for help.

I went running as fast as I could.
A monkey was falling off a piece of wood.

I picked him up and sat him on the ground.
He said thank you ma`m I`m glad you were around.

I saw a dog and cat having a cup of tea.
Would you like a cup they sweetly asked me?

I said no thank you and off I went.
When farther up the road I saw a tent.

I got a little closer and peeked inside.
There was Roy Rogers and Gene Autry well dang my hide.

I had a feeling the day was about through.
When I heard someone say I`ve been looking for you.

I looked around and there stood my brother Ray.
Its been almost five years since he passed away.

The tears started flowing down my face.
He smiled and said isn`t this a beautiful place?

He turned around and started to leave.
Then he turned back and looked at me.

I begged him please not to go.
We all miss you and love you so.

He smiled and said tell everyone I`m ok.
I love you all and we`ll be together again one day.







Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

[This message has been edited by N orth Carolina Girl (02-11-2002 01:26 PM).]

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Silver Streak
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1 posted 2002-02-11 09:55 AM


Juanita, this is awesome.

I read your poem and shed little  tears
I cried with laughter, inside my skin of fear

For every little bug that ever crawled
Flying with me in the sky as I bawled.

This one truth, Juanita, I say to you
We'll love together some day in the blue.

Where spirits live and never ever die.
And no one ever, ever, ever cries.

Thanks Juanita, this is very beautiful. I love it!!!
((Juanita))
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Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

[This message has been edited by Silver Streak (02-11-2002 09:57 AM).]

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2002-02-11 10:03 AM


North Carolina Girl,
A fun poem and I enjoyed the read.

N orth Carolina Girl
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3 posted 2002-02-11 10:53 AM


Newell,thank you so much for the kind words and your poem.This poem started out to be a silly poem.But it seemed my brother took over toward the end.

Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

N orth Carolina Girl
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4 posted 2002-02-11 10:54 AM


Seymour,thanks for reading.

Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

Marsha
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5 posted 2002-02-11 11:13 AM


Juanita my dearest friend I suppose you think that I’m going to praise you to the skies? Hmmm? …….. Well, of course I am, this is utterly utterly wonderful as YOU very well know.

This is really fabulous writing sometimes when you don’t expect it showers of moonbeams descend on you. They dropped like little twinkles of delight when I read this. Oh my eyes they are refreshed and my soul is washed in joy this is sooooooooo fabulous. YOU always treat my soul to sheer delight thank you

Absolutely first class writing



Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1


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6 posted 2002-02-11 12:10 PM


N Carolina, well look what you have went and done. started out humorous, I got the giggles, and ended up in tears. great write. a sad ending, and I am sorry for your loss, and I greatly admire your sense of humor. floria

Floria

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But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Bill Charles
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7 posted 2002-02-11 12:23 PM


North Carolina Girl - I'd believe anything from a North Carolina Girl. You made me smile this morning, and also have brought back some fond memories of my younger brother... Thank you....

BC
  

N orth Carolina Girl
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8 posted 2002-02-11 12:38 PM


Marsha,you always say such sweet things and you are such a dear special friend.




Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

[This message has been edited by N orth Carolina Girl (02-11-2002 01:22 PM).]

N orth Carolina Girl
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9 posted 2002-02-11 12:41 PM


Floria,this was suppose to be funny just like it started out.It just made a detour along the way.Thanks for reading.

Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

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10 posted 2002-02-11 12:51 PM


I love to come along for the ride in your adventures! (hugs)
N orth Carolina Girl
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11 posted 2002-02-11 01:24 PM


Bill,thank you my friend and I`m glad I brought back some memories of your brother.

Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

N orth Carolina Girl
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12 posted 2002-02-11 01:25 PM


RosePetal,thanks for reading and I`m glad you came along with me.

Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

Larry C
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13 posted 2002-02-11 06:34 PM


Juanita,
Well...that was indeed a surpise for me. I got goosebumps on this and a smile at the same time. How did you do that? What a fabulous tribute. Wow!

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14 posted 2002-02-11 06:44 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, your gorgeous words made me cry, it saddened me a little to see this all become clear in the end but I also am so happy you have lovely muses like this, for all your loved ones will always be with you! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Juanita, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

N orth Carolina Girl
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15 posted 2002-02-11 07:24 PM


Larry,I think I only wrote the first part I think my brother was letting me know he was ok.This poem was suppose to be funny all the way through and it ended like this.Thanks for reading.

Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

N orth Carolina Girl
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16 posted 2002-02-11 07:26 PM


Noah,I have to think I`ll see him again one day.Thank you so much for reading this.

Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

GenXer
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17 posted 2002-02-11 09:14 PM


Juanita - The ending of this was so very sad.  I think you should head to the funny farm to relieve some of your sadness.

Dave

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18 posted 2002-02-11 11:21 PM


a superbly woven poem here, Juanita. You lead the reader perfectly through pieces of happy fluff right into a sledgehammer ending and leave the reader saying, "What happened?"....fantastic work!
Madame Chipmunk
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19 posted 2002-02-12 12:45 PM


Juanita....I bet Ray would have really loved this poem.  You are a very special person.
Only a very special person could combine humor and death and come up with a lovely poem.

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

N orth Carolina Girl
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20 posted 2002-02-12 06:03 AM


Dave,my friend off to the Funny Farm I go.

Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

N orth Carolina Girl
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21 posted 2002-02-12 06:04 AM


Balladeer,thank you for your kind words and taking time to read this.

Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

N orth Carolina Girl
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22 posted 2002-02-12 06:06 AM


Lyra,thanks my dear friend and you`re right Ray would have like this.


TAKE CARE!

Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

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23 posted 2002-02-13 10:51 AM


What a wonderful, beautiful imagination you have ... and a great point made

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

sodpossom
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24 posted 2002-02-13 11:40 AM


Mama
You are right,I don't believe it but it is a very good write!

Pilgrimage
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25 posted 2002-02-13 11:54 AM


Dear Juanita,
I was grinning and thinking you belong on the funny farm for sure, and then it was like I walked into a wall. I'm stunned, and I started to cry, but I can't cry here, you know. So I blew my nose, and I'll carry on. You've outdone yourself on this one.

Nan

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26 posted 2002-02-13 11:56 AM


enjoy
N orth Carolina Girl
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27 posted 2002-02-13 12:16 PM


Interloper,thanks so much i really appreciate it.

Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

N orth Carolina Girl
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28 posted 2002-02-13 12:17 PM


Stevie,you know you`re not suppose to doubt your mama.


Love you!

N orth Carolina Girl
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29 posted 2002-02-13 12:19 PM


Nan,thanks friend!

Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

N orth Carolina Girl
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30 posted 2002-02-13 12:19 PM


Vandana,thank you!

Juanita

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