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Sunshine
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0 posted 2002-02-11 06:27 AM




When Your Heart Comes Home

From time to time it's simple to lose
the sentient Keeper of your Heart,
so many occurrences in each day
so many things in which to take part

So many great roles to play, so very little time,
if the Keeper of your Heart never calls you, “mine”

Now and then you may forget to say
to the steadfast Keeper of your Heart,
“I love you very much, my dear”
and that loss can render you apart

So very little time, so many great roles to play,
If you as Keeper of the Heart, forget these words to say

Is it hard throughout the day to call your love, your friend?
Is it difficult to find a quiet moment in which to spend
a hug, a kiss, or impart a loving whisper in their ear?
Wouldn’t you as a Keeper, know in your Heart this mend?

So many great roles to play, so very little time
if the Keeper of your Heart never calls you “mine”

So if you have a home within your widening heart,
and when next your love, to your love, impart
then look into the eyes of that, your greatest gift,
and with God’s countenance, give your love a lift...

Admit there is very little time, for the role you play is great
and thank God daily, my dear, to have your loving mate





Revised 11 Feb 02

Graphics, courtesy, Pat's Web Graphics http://www.patswebgraphics.com/valentine/valentine.html



© Copyright 2002 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-02-11 07:15 AM


Love the thoughts within this poem...James
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2 posted 2002-02-11 08:15 AM


Absolutely beautiful Karilea


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3 posted 2002-02-11 08:30 AM


"So if you have a home within your widening heart,
and when next your love, to your love, impart
then look into the eyes of that, your greatest gift,
and with God’s countenance, give your love a lift...

Admit there is very little time, for the role you play is great
and thank God daily, my dear, to have your loving mate."




(smiles) You are sooooooo romantic, sweet friend, what a gorgeous gift to give your Valentine, I LOVE IT!!! (kiss on cheek) May you forever look through loves eyes and find true happiness, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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4 posted 2002-02-11 08:39 AM


A beautiful Valentine poem Karilea, with very true thoughts of how we can and do get so caught up with 'life' and at times forget to stop and say a few special words to the one we love.  Love this one!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

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5 posted 2002-02-11 09:41 AM


Okies..I'm on a mission to find *sigh* poetry today.

THIS IS ONE OF THEM!
I just love this!

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6 posted 2002-02-11 10:08 AM


Karilea,
A lovely, lovely ray of sun. Thank you dear.

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7 posted 2002-02-11 10:12 AM


well done my friend. . . this is very wonderful from you. . .

full of love and feeling. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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8 posted 2002-02-11 11:19 AM


Karilea, this is sooooooo beautiful! Thanks for sharing!
-newell

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Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

Martie
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9 posted 2002-02-11 11:29 AM


Karilea--Oh, how true!  How beautifully you pen the reminder.    
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10 posted 2002-02-11 12:06 PM


Karilea, how absolutely beautiful
"So very little time, so many great roles to play,
If you as Keeper of the Heart, forget these words to say"
I love this one so much, floria

Floria

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But die with all their music in them"
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11 posted 2002-02-11 07:02 PM


Excellent thoughts for us all to remember
on that day....maybe start right now to
remember them...Thanks Kari...

Nan
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12 posted 2002-02-12 09:16 AM


Wonderful - simply wonderful... I have nothing less to say...
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13 posted 2002-02-12 10:42 AM


AWESOME!

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14 posted 2002-02-12 11:50 AM


Time, it's sand's a finite trickle,
the heart doth limit beats,
why men this life would be so fickle
to refrain from words so sweet,
whose very sound would soothe most pain
once spoke a soul renew,
to parched fears come words like rain
in a bounty of "I Love You's.

......thanks for the reminder

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15 posted 2002-02-12 12:25 PM


That special love is truly one of the greatese blessings God can give. A beautiful reminder.

sky

jfreak
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16 posted 2002-02-12 01:39 PM


Sunshine,

Hey there, I just want to say that I think this poem is good, but it could be better.  & I mean format...the thought and message are clear and upfront, the only gripe I have is that in your four line stanzas, you keep changing the scheme.  The rhyme scheme goes all over and I am not saying the poem doesn't work the way it is, remarkably the rhythm of the poem isn't thrown off, but still you need to watch that, b/c other poems will feel choppy or jerky to the reader.  If I haven't explained this clearly, feel free to email me and I will do my best to clarify!

Other than that it was a really good poem content wise.  Just format, was a little off to me.  Keep up the good work.

J~

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