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Temptress
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0 posted 2002-02-09 06:11 PM


long..I know..sorry..    


Words take over as I close my eyes
and things catipulted out of the corner
arise, sailing themselves with an unkempt dignity.
There are lessons to be learned from closing ones' eyes and letting the muse take form
letting her dance
wind swept
emotion sewpt
into the soul of one lost delicate creature of habit.
As I let storms invade my mind so that they may
persue their true course
this is at least an advance toward settling my spirit for this hour.
Turn to me, the darkness, tickles with its tongue
and I am oblvious to anything but believe its call
and the sole intent to do more harm to myself
with boxing it all up and going inside
than supplying the outlest for fears and bad days.
Run on sentences said perfectly...
There is a promise of nothing more than the same
as I think of tomorrow and try to see its better mood.
These are the journal rambles that my mind won't cease doing
and if I ever arrive in the land of greater writing
then perhaps I should rest
and pause
and say thanks for what I do have
instead of what is systematically being taken from me.
I'm shattering again
and need nor want no hand to hold
for there is no power any human could offer
(no, not even love)
at this very moment that would lift me from the pull of colliding storms.
Say I'm great
say I'm loving and kind
and battling and strong
but I am not.
I am small
and weak
weary toned
and more sharp edged than even magical swords.
Say I am loving
and unselfish
and thoughtful
but I am not
Not at this very moment.
I am small
and weak
and insignificant in all other things God has planned
and until I realize I can't do it all myself
I will still be small
and weak
and failing
and at this
very
moment
I don't want to love
nor seek
nor break
nor command the attention of the world.
I just want to be held in one perfect uninterrupted moment
of not caring
but then in that selfish moment I could loose my soul as punishment
and what would a heart be without a soul?
and what am I without both?
But I don't want to love
nor seek
nor break
nor be.
I would write myself off the page
but I'd miss me
and so would you.



For all who watch.Dare you say hello? Come in and ask the questions that are on your mind, but spare me your judgement until you truly sipped of me.

[This message has been edited by Temptress (02-09-2002 06:14 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-02-09 06:30 PM


I would write myself off the page
but I'd miss me
and so would you.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Great write with a wonderful closing Jenn.
Love it when you get into a 'moody ramble.'
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

Mistletoe Angel
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2 posted 2002-02-09 11:11 PM




(smiles) Oooohhhhhh...I just love your gorgeous ramblings, sweet friend, I am always so astonished by all the wonderful feelings you express! (kiss on cheek) I love it, sweet friend, this is wonderful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jenn, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

strbbux
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Posts 3859

3 posted 2002-02-10 10:20 AM


Temptress, I have a feeling from reading your poetry that once your pen gets put to paper it just flows, it won't stop till it has said all that needs to be said, Your writings just flow, and this was wonderful. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Janet Marie
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4 posted 2002-02-10 10:42 AM


I've always enjoyed a good mood swing...
and a ramble of emotion
and? sometimes brievety is not possible when we feel so much.
Write it out..."ramble" on Poetess Jenn.

You speak to me in riddles and you speak to me in rhymes.
My body aches to breathe your breath ... your words keep me alive.

~Sarah McLachlan~

peaches73533
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since 2001-11-04
Posts 981
OK, USA
5 posted 2002-02-10 11:01 AM


I love your ramblings and they flow so well.
peaches

Sven
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6 posted 2002-02-10 07:50 PM


yes. . . you would be missed. . .

I'm always amazed at the depth and power of your work. . . well done. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

amusemi
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Posts 1262
A State of Disarray
7 posted 2002-02-10 07:58 PM


I remember many days where the only thing that kept me here was faith...not the kind that most people have...of better times and healing ways.  It is the faith that even if I chose to leave of my own accord I would still exist.  If I could have figured out a way to completely not exist I would have done it.  

"I just want to be held in one perfect uninterrupted moment
of not caring
but then in that selfish moment I could loose my soul as punishment
and what would a heart be without a soul?"

The preceding lines really hit me hard and are very powerful.

This is not rambling.  It is incredible!

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