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With Cool Jazz
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With Cool Jazz |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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With Cool Jazz The street was wide in front of the stone church wide enough for the two of them standing and I van filled with flowers saw how the stones had slipped their structure to trace a face she lit with fingers marking meaning into the bewilderment of his hushed question I thought love crossed from their silent language for all I heard was cool jazz and the beat of my accelerator Coming down my watching found them again still facing off beside the car their hands on each other’s cheeks holding locked eyes of youth and new and forgive passed between them into just a smile of me with cool jazz |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Coming down my watching found them again still facing off beside the car their hands on each other’s cheeks holding locked eyes of youth and new and forgive passed between them into just a smile of me with cool jazz' Fantastic imagery, Martie...truly another brilliant write from you...the feeling and sentiment are so intense...I really liked this! sp   And though my heart feels all alone without you |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
This is soooo marvelous!! I don't think I could pick a part out of this piece that I like better than another - the entire thing flows and rolls just like cool jazz. You deserve a standing ovation and balloons!   ...and her crown was formed by the ice in her eyes |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Ooohhhhhhh...these words are smooth and flows with deep emotion, sweet friend, your gorgeous words always make me smile! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is a wonderful poem! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
their hands on each other’s cheeks holding locked eyes of youth and new and forgive passed between them into just a smile of me with cool jazz ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Ah Martie! No one writes like you...no one! Love this! Hugs, Nancy ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
A little explanation: My husband and I own a flower shop...I do a lot of flower deliveries and also alot of watching. This scene between the couple in the poem was something I saw on one of my runs...up the street they were mad, down the street in love...go figure! Nancy, Noah, Snow pants and Ice Queen..thank you so much for your wonderful replies!  |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Martie, you told the story with a soft flow of words....I like this very much |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
saw how the stones had slipped their structure to trace a face she lit with fingers marking meaning into the bewilderment of his hushed question I thought love crossed from their silent language for all I heard was cool jazz ====================================== holding locked eyes of youth and new and forgive passed between them ========================================= no need to explain....it twas all there in classic Martie style ... and? your poetry is "cool jazz" kiss me a carnation on the next run  You speak to me in riddles and you speak to me in rhymes. My body aches to breathe your breath ... your words keep me alive. ~Sarah McLachlan~ [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (02-08-2002 09:09 PM).] |
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