I Slept Alone - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

0 posted 2002-02-06 03:49 PM

I Slept Alone

Your arms enfold my curves no more
still, I smell your cologne
and dreams they scream upon the floor
tonight, I sleep alone
~
The heart that fed your appetite
hungers for it's freedom
starving my lips for love's true bite
no sight of fated crumb
~
I served myself on a platter
to hold your devotion
wine and dine annulled in shatter
with deceit's commotion
~
Our passion was inadequate
time groans to mock our past
for, your caress was counterfeit
affairs just never last
~
The moist of your kiss still dances
'pon feeble memory
now I embrace second chances
to rid of fool's debris
~
But, for now I go on crying
within this break of bone
and fantasies go on dying
tonight, I weep to stone

By Melissa P. Monette

[This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (02-06-2002 03:53 PM).]

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

1 posted 2002-02-06 03:52 PM

Dear Melissa, no wonder you write so well. You have the name of an artist, my favorite at that, Monette, this is wonderful.

floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

2 posted 2002-02-06 03:56 PM

Well thank you Floria

It seems that I can always count on you to read my poetry.

Also, his name was Claude Monet - he's french, I'm not. But, thanks for the high compliment

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

3 posted 2002-02-06 03:58 PM

I'm only here for about 30 minutes a day, Melissa, and wont' be for awhile off and on, but I love your poetry as well. It's beautiful and I hope things are going better for you hon\

Kathleen--(Kay)
"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Auguste

Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

4 posted 2002-02-06 03:59 PM

Melissa,

This is one heck of a poem. VERY good writing! I'm keeping it.

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2002-02-06 06:41 PM

Your arms enfold my curves no more
still, I smell your cologne
and dreams they scream upon the floor
tonight, I sleep alone
===========================

well that verse just goes thru me....
How well I know this feeling.
Some scents never leave us...no matter how much time passes...just the hint of them can bring back so much.
an aching, passionate write Melis.
well done sweets,
jm

You speak to me in riddles and you speak to me in rhymes.
My body aches to breathe your breath ... your words keep me alive.

~Sarah McLachlan~

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

6 posted 2002-02-06 07:09 PM

Melissa, whew, this has too much pain.
"Our passion was inadequate
time groans to mock our past
for, your caress was counterfeit
affairs just never last"

A counterfeit caress. God, that says it all.
Sandra
~

brianbeaudry
Member

since 2001-07-20

Posts 410
Northern Ontario Canada

7 posted 2002-02-06 07:10 PM

I felt your pain...it was etched in every line....love can deal great joy...sady it can also inflict great pain!!!Hugz of compassion my friend!!

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

8 posted 2002-02-06 07:15 PM

(tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Melissa, this is soooo very sad, my heart cries out to you and I pray with all my heart that you will be caressed forever and ever by the hand of true love! You deserve the greatest happiness, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Chelsea~
Member

since 2001-02-09

Posts 260
Ontario, CANADA

9 posted 2002-02-06 10:30 PM

missy,

you sure know how
to write pain with
power!
I'm glad this isn't
true to your life

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

10 posted 2002-02-07 01:04 AM

Melissa,
Such passionate pain...wow. An incredible expression of your loss.

amusemi
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1262
A State of Disarray

11 posted 2002-02-07 01:21 AM

Sleeping alone with a memory has to be one of the hadest things to face... Just know that others are in that same place (me included). This really touched my heart and it is a beautiful piece!!

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

12 posted 2002-02-07 01:27 AM

This is tastely done with a touch of bittness and sorrow that sits well.
A most beautiful and poignant piece.

*applause*

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

13 posted 2002-02-07 04:12 AM

Well done Melissa, this speaks for so many and scents are one thing that linger forever it seems and you wrote that so well.

The older I grow, the less important the comma becomes. Let the reader
catch his own breath."
~Elizabeth Clarkson Zwart~

Dennis L. White
Senior Member

since 2000-02-17

Posts 1463
Michigan, U.S.A.

14 posted 2002-02-12 08:22 PM

Melissa,
You describe well the angst of love lost. You just continue to amaze me with your talent. Peace unto you my friend, Dennis

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

15 posted 2002-02-12 08:28 PM

Melissa, this is somewhat sad, but it is
so very well written...showing a lot of
feelings and emotions...

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

16 posted 2002-02-12 08:33 PM

Ooops, 'tastely' that's a good word!
I think it's too late to edit!

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

17 posted 2002-02-12 09:10 PM

It always amazes me how you can make such beauty out of such sadness. For your poetry is always so tender, with so much feeling. Another fantastic piece from your pen of memories.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

18 posted 2002-02-13 10:40 AM

it's always amazing to see such beauty come from such pain. . .

the Queen of Romance, artist at work. . . superbly done my friend. . .

---------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Dulcinea
Senior Member

since 2001-07-22

Posts 774
IN

19 posted 2002-02-13 03:02 PM

I could hear those dreams screaming in agony, what a beautifully inscribed piece of heartache and sorrow.

RosePetal

Member Elite

since 2001-08-26

Posts 2985
South Florida

20 posted 2002-02-13 03:14 PM

a painful outpouring of the soul but you've done it so well. (hugs)

Magicmystery
Senior Member

since 2002-02-13

Posts 821
Windsor, Ontario, Canada

21 posted 2002-02-13 03:14 PM

I can remember his cologne... it was drakar... and in retrospect, I can still remember how good it felt to be with him... but alas, nothing is more truthful than time.
I have healed since, and so will you I am sure of this. Cherish the good memories and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow
But above all... be kind to yourself today.

Good friends are like a vintage wine.
Sweeter and more cherished with time.

Munda
Member Elite

since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

22 posted 2002-02-13 03:24 PM

Hauntingly sad and equally beautiful! Great job Melissa!

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

23 posted 2002-02-13 04:03 PM

A superb work born of ugly thoughts and pain. Such terrible fertilizer! Such a wonderful piece

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.