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quietwaters
Junior Member

since 2002-02-04

Posts 30
delray beach, florida

0 posted 2002-02-05 12:24 PM

I stand naked in moonlight,
me and my nation of memories.
Braving the cool indifference
of distant city lights, as gently
mocking as nostalgia...
I am not so much guilty as innocent
of all good intentions i've discarded,
(Spoken, promised, in the face
of a sunrise not yet seen)
in searching for a wealth
far beyond the shores of my birth.
Leaving loves and a thousand ties; seeking
golden trumpets to destroy a hundred Jerichos,
coming home. Ah, wishes, book-ended in cold
realities, still finding faith with sleeping,
And so you'll find me, yet standing,
still on my way to buying lottery tickets
for an option to ride a flying carpet home.
Waiting I give birth, dying, to greater longings,
always wondering if the road ahead
would do nothing else but bloom with
the same flower...
Shadow-touched, silvered crown of thorns
etching flesh and soul with bloody petals of
hope...and naked in an American
moonlight.

Siofra

Senior Member

since 2000-09-28

Posts 551
State of Suspended Passion

1 posted 2002-02-05 02:18 AM

Goodness!. No one has welcomed you to Passions yet? Well, I am welcoming you with a WOW! I love the places this takes me and the thoughts it leaves me with!

I am many.

amusemi
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1262
A State of Disarray

2 posted 2002-02-05 02:22 AM

Yes, welcome. Very expressive piece! I like it very much...hope to see more...hint, hint!!!

Kat

peppermint35
Senior Member

since 2000-05-28

Posts 1106
Texas, USA

3 posted 2002-02-05 02:29 AM

Indeed welcome!! and a powerful piece you've written.. if this is the first.. I cannot wait to read more

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
Percy Bysshe Shelley

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

4 posted 2002-02-05 02:56 AM

Waiting I give birth, dying, to greater longings,

very awesome post here--stranger in a strange land? No MORE!

WELCOME!!!

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2002-02-05 07:22 AM

A very Warm Welcome to Passions! This is quite a write! Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

6 posted 2002-02-05 07:30 AM

I am not so much guilty as innocent
of all good intentions i've discarded,
(Spoken, promised, in the face
of a sunrise not yet seen)
in searching for a wealth
far beyond the shores of my birth.
Leaving loves and a thousand ties; seeking
golden trumpets to destroy a hundred Jerichos,
coming home. Ah, wishes, book-ended in cold
realities, still finding faith with sleeping,
===================================

Shadow-touched, silvered crown of thorns
etching flesh and soul with bloody petals of
hope...and naked in an American
moonlight.
=======================================

Youve got some superb lines and expressions in this, also excellent imagery, and creative metaphor and analogy.
welcome to Poetry Land ... this is a wonderful entrance to our shores

So nice to have you here with us.
I look forward to more of your writings.
jm

You speak to me in riddles and you speak to me in rhymes.
My body aches to breathe your breath ... your words keep me alive.

~Sarah McLachlan~

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (02-05-2002 07:32 AM).]

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

7 posted 2002-02-05 08:28 AM

This is amazing poetry to read for inspiration but amazing to read for anything!
You obviously have a grasp of imagery and phrasing. Welcome. Keep Writing.

Kathleen--(Kay)
"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

8 posted 2002-02-05 09:09 AM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!

Excellent First Post!
I look forward to seeing more of your work!
Make yourself at home.
Read, comment on others work, and most of all enjoy!
~Hugs, Nancy Lee~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

9 posted 2002-02-05 09:35 AM

"Waiting I give birth, dying, to greater longings,
always wondering if the road ahead
would do nothing else but bloom with
the same flower..."

this is amazing....welcome

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

10 posted 2002-02-05 09:37 AM

Welcome to Passions. I look forward to more of your work

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

11 posted 2002-02-05 12:17 PM

Welcome to Passions!

Fantasic first post! Enjoyed reading!

~Tier

Auguste

Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

12 posted 2002-02-05 12:28 PM

This is truly wonderful writing and I can't wait to read more of you. Welcome to Passions. It's always nice to see new faces.

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

13 posted 2002-02-05 12:49 PM

Welcome to Passions, this was an awesome write, I look forward to reading more of your work. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

quietwaters
Junior Member

since 2002-02-04

Posts 30
delray beach, florida

14 posted 2002-02-07 07:53 PM

thank you all...

very much.

ray

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

15 posted 2002-02-07 08:37 PM

Your first post is quite wonderful, both the imagery and the emotions you projected invite further reflection. Welcome to Passions, quietwaters!

skyshine

Member Elite

since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

16 posted 2002-02-07 09:00 PM

Very descriptive, quietwaters!

sky

[This message has been edited by skyshine (02-07-2002 09:01 PM).]

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