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Open Poetry #18

The Presence of Evil

Morcastlin
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since 2002-01-14

Posts 244
The Jersey Shore, USA

0 posted 2002-01-31 11:05 AM

Ah, that feeling...
Stark and cold upon the spine
Boiling, reeling, pent-up steeling
A disallignment of the spirits
Oily, darkened serpent, fear it
Boldly coiling about your bowels
Hissing growls, a roll so stunning
In a duel for control
Blood all running hot and loose
A rushing fuel so profuse
Chills and cools to icy pools
of confusion, fearing fusion
It seeps and fills your souls and wills
As shadows fall in lilting tones
on your heart and mind and bones
It doles out darts of churning light
unrefined and spouting bright
Coals of burning beasts
that roam and stroll
the whole greased fold
outside of time, to nest and feast
within the ghost sublime.

Silver Streak
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since 2002-01-02

Posts 3625
FL, USA

1 posted 2002-01-31 12:25 PM

Beautiful write about night.

-newell

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Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

2 posted 2002-01-31 01:10 PM

EXCELLENT!!!

fine writing here!

strbbux
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since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

3 posted 2002-01-31 01:14 PM

Wonderful. got the chills half way through, floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Morcastlin
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since 2002-01-14

Posts 244
The Jersey Shore, USA

4 posted 2002-01-31 02:22 PM

Thank you very much for your commets I really appreciate them! Despite the dark subject I had lots of fun writing this, I was experimenting with internal and external rhyme with a building momentum of rhythm. ;o)

Love,
Bonnie

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