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Soft Sounds
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Soft Sounds |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
The soft sounds, That once spoken drift on wind, Swirling round Twisting back, To find a heart to get in, But it’s black, Burnt cinders, Scorched beyond recognition, Can’t enter That dark place, Finds a silent reception, Solemn face Sends them back in a rebound. Gloom |
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Morcastlin Member
since 2002-01-14
Posts 244The Jersey Shore, USA |
Wow, that was heavy! This was great, really got my wheels turning! The wording was fabulous! Well done! Love, Bonnie |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Gloom, Well written poem. Here's one for you, Abandon hardness in the past Follow God to softness, rest, today God decides all things that last Not man, with thoughts of yesterday. -Silver Streak Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
well? whaddya expect? i kept saying, "speak UP!! please!" but NO!... hell, after a while, it just sorta burns ya out, y'know? hehehe oh never mind... i really liked this, Gloom! i liked this a lot!  |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
I like the last line especially, sending it back in a rebound. great write Prof. floria Floria |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Morcastlin, Glad my turn of words pleased you, Thank you, Silver Streak, For the poetic response Thank you, Doreen Peri, Pleased you liked it, But this is more of burn away than burn up Thank you, Strbbux, Sort of like an echo off a wall, Gloom |
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Phaedrus Member
since 2002-01-26
Posts 180 |
Interesting form, it seems to be syllabic and based around odd numbers, this format had to be intentional, right? Thanks for the chance to read. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Wow, this poem speaks like a reverberating echo, sweet friend, I love it! (big hugggssssss) Your words are always such a delightful sound to all of us, sweet friend, we all love you so much, this is wonderful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Aszard, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (01-31-2002 06:59 PM).] |
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sodpossom Senior Member
since 2001-06-15
Posts 723N.C |
Very deep and well done! |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Phaedrus, Very intentional, based on 3,7, & 13 This is one of my primary personal forms, The sequel “Harsh Words” just posted has the same format. The couplet of 3 is slightly different than what I call my classical style, But still it is the basic form. Probably more information than you wanted. Thank you, Mistletoe Angel, Your responses are always so kind and sweet. Thank you, sodpossom, Glad you enjoyed. Gloom |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Do I hear an echo in here? Smiling...booting you back to the top! I want to see this one next to the other!  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Shivers...this gave me shivers... |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
this was really interesting, form and all! Now I am off to read your "Harsh Sounds" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very interesting write here Professor. Made me feel differently than 'Harsh Sounds'..but, still not a contented good feeling. Very well done...I do enjoy your writing style so much! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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