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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2002-01-29 05:44 AM

we were unsure
when we went there
the first time
to the park of dreams
where the shadow sun shined
and we wore glasses
to protect our eyes

I was your jungle jim
you climbed me slowly
in your tennis shoes
and short skirt
you didn't mind my eyes
when you went to the top
and hung upside down
you laughed at the whispers
from the wicked gods
in dark trees

I asked if you wanted
to swing
you said maybe later
in the relatonship
but for now
you would just be
a merrygoround
with me on your edges
and that we
could just spin slow

at first we did
but the whispers
pushed
us faster
I almost fell off
you pulled me to your center
and held me with your legs
I closed my eyes
until the whispers were silent
and you stopped trembling

it was time to leave
then
but we held hands
and threw our glasses away
the dark didn't hurt
our eyes now
we walked slowly
deliberate
toward the voices
that hid in the trees

©Dark

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2002-01-29 06:13 AM

I remember this one...still like the swinging from the trees idea....lol. Good to see you dark.

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

2 posted 2002-01-29 09:58 AM

*sigh* Amazing...you have a way the weaves a vision filled with sensual play into your poems...I see freely it all unfolding before my eyes and even the darkness has it place within the poem....for who says what is considered dark. Very well done. I really liked reading this poem. **big hugs**

To play in this park of fantasy would be an interesting adventure.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

3 posted 2002-01-29 10:04 AM

GS...in our dreams we drift from park
to sea to mountain...to find the hidden ones

thank you

Startime..so pleased to have your eyes review my humble works, please drift on the image boats I build and wear the clouds of
their fantasy

thank you so much

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2002-01-29 10:09 AM

BRAVO!!! Ooohhhhhh...such beautiful and sensual imagery fills your words, sweet freind, you always write such visions that captivate us all! (big hugggssssss) I love it, sweet friend, we all love you so much, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

5 posted 2002-01-29 10:19 AM

Noah..
you bless me with your reviews, thank you for the moments

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2002-01-29 11:27 AM

DarkStranger~
What a breathlessly lovely read~

'I was your jungle jim
you climbed me slowly
in your tennis shoes
and short skirt
you didn't mind my eyes
when you went to the top
and hung upside down
you laughed at the whispers
from the wicked gods
in dark trees'

I enjoyed it all ... really enjoyed the imagery~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

7 posted 2002-01-29 11:30 AM

Ms Marge...

humble thanks for your review, you bless me with your comments

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

8 posted 2002-01-29 11:35 AM

A day in the park never sounded so good!
I like how you incorporated the playground
equipment. It's all relevant huh?
This made me feel like a kid again.

This was lots of fun,
nice work Dark one~

Janette

Member Elite

since 2001-07-20

Posts 2843
Chicagoland for now

9 posted 2002-01-29 11:42 AM

play on ... yes play on

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

10 posted 2002-01-29 11:50 AM

Ms blues...the equipment
is standard, please feel free
and use it often

thank you

Janette...to play
for the pale blush a dark song
will you attend and listen

thank you

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

11 posted 2002-01-29 02:06 PM

Now this is the kind of playground I could stay at all day and night, and never get bored! Very nice fantasies here.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

12 posted 2002-01-29 02:46 PM

midnitesun, thank you for letting your eyes read..and I hope the fantasy lives in thought

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

13 posted 2002-01-29 02:55 PM

WOW!! Lets go to the playground!
Amazing and oh so sensual....love it!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

D.Lester Young
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1219
Austin, Tx

14 posted 2002-01-29 03:55 PM

Interwoven weaves with magic results. This is a graet work.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

15 posted 2002-01-29 03:55 PM

"but we held hands
and threw our glasses away
the dark didn't hurt
our eyes now
we walked slowly
deliberate
toward the voices
that hid in the trees"

oh, I 'd like to play too

very nice D
love the images you give
always

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

16 posted 2002-01-29 04:16 PM

Enchantress, thank you for your sigh smiles and for reading my park pictures

D Lester Young, thank you for your kind reply, I appreciate you.

SEA, a playground that is safe for dark thoughts and actions..please visit anytime..

thank you

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