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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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love stories are better on tv when housed inside some metal cage with a looking glass in a room without electric under a spit ocean with ear muff hands that deftly listen than in my dreams where they pry open my eyes with rocking chair feet and press themselves like wallpaper over my breathing holes making me taste their smeared paste of rub it in empty as I wait for another dream of her just blinking an eye ©Dark [This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (01-25-2002 10:44 AM).] |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
DS~ I read between the lines on this.....vivid images...nicely put....  Lauren~ Twas not into my ears you whispered |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS The way you write is interesting and provocative. I like that. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Lauren, thank you for your read lady L Martie, I appreciate your comments very much |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LonelyStranger~ 'where they pry open my eyes with rocking chair feet and press themselves like wallpaper over my breathing holes' Very original thoughts here~ Enjoyed the read~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Dark Stranger, you should try sleeping with you head outside the bedclothes, that way there would be no more dreams of smothering love. lol Seriously though what tangerine images you paint. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Marge, thank you sweet lady for your review and comments Kethry, she doesn't smother me really, it is more the smothering of time waiting for her to return again thank you so much |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Ooohhhhhh...this is sooooooo creative, sweet friend, I love it! It seems all my love stories come in my dreams but I long for the day when I fall into my girls arms! (big hugggsssss) I love it, sweet friend, this is wonderful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  ;rolling:May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
this is so cool, its very unique writing! enjoyed |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Hmmm rose petal took the words right out of my mouth, I was about to say unique, Oh well, I'll say it anyway, UNIQUE very nice. floria Floria |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* now why is there a feeling of sadness....You are much more fulfilled when she is close in your embrace sharing the passions that flow between you....when apart you have a missing half to you...very interesting...I like the depth of your love for her...it is beautiful. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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