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BluesSerenade
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0 posted 2002-01-23 05:56 PM


We pick and choose our words
speaking carefully
so as not to mix the message.

How dare we care to feel
or say what's on our minds
for interpretations are a strange thing
taken in long drawn out strides.

What can't be heard or felt in the words
pitfalls of the risks that factor in
when we read between the lines.

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Irish Rose
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1 posted 2002-01-23 05:59 PM


We pick and choose our words
                    speaking carefully
                    so as not to mix the message.

                    How dare we care to feel
                    or say what's on our minds
                    for interpretations are a strange thing
                    taken in long drawn out strides.

                    What can't be heard or felt in the words
                    pitfalls of the risks that factor in
                    when we read between the lines."

You're so pretty!

Yes, we DO pick our words that way many times and oh, I love this poem so much!
I read so much in this one, so much.  I am beginning to take more risks in my own writing, without reservation, with confidence, maybe i read this wrong, but that's what I got out of this.  

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

BluesSerenade
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2 posted 2002-01-23 06:04 PM


You are so sweet!!  
It's the old foot in mouth syndrome!

Thank you so much Kathleen~

Lori~

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3 posted 2002-01-23 06:24 PM




(smiles) Yes, yes, we all choose our words carefully as we speak and write, and sometimes we take time just to learn new words to expand our horizons and taking chances with joy! (kiss on cheek) I love it, sweet friend, your words are a delight to read, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2002-01-23 06:33 PM


lovely words
picked by choice
worn on your whispers

BluesSerenade
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5 posted 2002-01-23 06:35 PM


Thank you Dear Noah~
I guess if we can say what we mean
we're half way there.  The elements
are different online when words
are all we have.


BluesSerenade
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6 posted 2002-01-23 06:39 PM


Hey I almost missed you DS,
almost but not quite.
Thank you for reading dear Sir.

A Tone of Voice
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7 posted 2002-01-23 06:48 PM


i think this is what i am, a mixed message.
~grin~ I liked this, wise words.

Atov

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8 posted 2002-01-23 06:52 PM


I agree with kathleen, you are very pretty.
I often find myself saying something but actually meaning it in a good way and people take it the wrong way. I must be more careful hehe.

Larry C
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9 posted 2002-01-23 06:57 PM


BluesSerenade,
Okay, read between these lines. LOL I totally agree and like how you expressed it.

ShadowRider
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10 posted 2002-01-23 08:05 PM


LA, i hope i have learned my lessons, the one you talk about in your poem.
Gawwwwwd! it took me long enough.  Your words ring of such truth, that it
makes my past seem foolish and wrongfooted.

Sometimes, well....almost all of the time *s*, you put your finger on
life lessons sooooooo well in your poetry.  

psssstt...~whispering~.i think you are pretty too, LA.  tSR


BluesSerenade
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11 posted 2002-01-23 09:39 PM


Atov~  Join the club!  We all have our moments,
some just have them more than others.
I think I fall in the some more than others
category.     
Thank you gal.

RosePetal~  That is exactly what I'm talking
about.  When we try to say what we feel and our words come out all wrong.  We're damned if we do and damned if we don't.    
Thanks a heap for reading and responding.

Larry~  You make it so easy.  
I promise not to take advantage of you.  
Thanks!

ShadowRider~  We're only human and we learn from out mistakes. Life's one big lesson isn't it?   Thank you for your nice reply.

Bill Charles
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12 posted 2002-01-23 10:05 PM


BluesSerenade - reading between the lines. Most powerful words these are. Between the lines, yes.. And you have told it well...

BC

Startime
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13 posted 2002-01-23 10:25 PM


*sigh* I have learned the hard way not to believe much that poems say when written by someone I feel drawn to so as not to get trapped into believing something my heart wants but is not there....Mixed messages can cause lots of pain. I write fantasy...so as not to deceive. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

BluesSerenade
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14 posted 2002-01-23 11:02 PM


Bill Charles~ Thank you very much, it is easy to get caught in the trap.  I'm reminded of that song,

'I'm just a soul who's intentions are good
oh Lord please don't let me be misundertood'

Startime~  Thank you for your wise words.
The pain is often times self inflicted.  You've got me thinking on writing something along the lines of a dream fantasy.  That leaves alot to the imagination and desires.  I just might!  
  

jwesley
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15 posted 2002-01-23 11:42 PM


I think that no matter how carefully one picks one's words, ears tend to hear what they wish to hear filtering out all else. For instance "I love you" heard by one's who are angry or hurt, means something different than the same words heard by one in love, though the words were said the same way. That doesn't alleviate us of the responsibility of kindness, gentleness - Niceness! - tho many forget or could care less about the sublties.

And, yes, you are very pretty. (so now you have the task of "hearing" those words the way you "wish" to hear them...don't you?  But, do you hear (see) them the way I meant them?? --- If a tree falls in the forest....etc., etc.)

easy now...

jwesley  (hee, hee)

jwesley

BluesSerenade
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16 posted 2002-01-24 12:12 PM


You're funny and you make a whole lot of sense. I'm listening closely and I will take your compliments and appreciate them.  
Thank you jwesley~ do tell, where does the tree fall?  

jwesley
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17 posted 2002-01-25 02:10 PM


Ahh...the quick, simple answer is, and I'm sure you know the saying...kinda goes - "if a tree falls in the forest and no one is there to hear, does it still make a sound??"

The harder, less obvious will have to wait until I have more time (because I have to think something up!)

jimmy

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18 posted 2002-01-25 04:12 PM


i like very much, made me think of death, and how we dwell too much on the minor importances of life.

painly

Kethry
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19 posted 2002-01-25 05:15 PM


Words have such power don't they...and your words have more power than most. Well done.
Write on
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



BluesSerenade
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20 posted 2002-01-25 05:55 PM


Yup, the small stuff isn't worth the sweat!
Thanks Painly.

Hi Kethry~  This seemed like such a simple poem,
but the truth is pretty simple when it comes right down to it.
Thanks for reading.

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