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. . . we shall die together . . . Tanka
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. . . we shall die together . . . Tanka |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
you will never know just how much I have loved you it is my secret I carry it to my death we shall both die together Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. [This message has been edited by Interloper (01-03-2002 11:23 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Interloper, In the sense that every moment dies this is well said. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The understatement of this speaks volumes...well done, Sir... |
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Apachecat906 Member
since 2001-09-04
Posts 217Michigan, USA |
I love your poem and your signature as well. This is straight from the heart, yours or mine, Im not sure? Nice. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
ahh yes, I have one of these too..... Keeping this.  |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Lovely. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* a heartfelt statement that is filled with feelings. I got lost in thinking it should not be a secret.*sigh* love is something to be shared. **big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
that you cannot express joy in honesty soon you would rather die then find happiness, a state of mind Seems you have jumpstarted my quiet muse. Thank you. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
hmm...very well said...i have such a love stored away as well...perhaps we all do..  hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Soooooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, sometimes it is very hard to reveal secrets, but with the magic of true love, one can't help but want to share it as much as they could ever dream of! (big hugggssssss) You are soooooooo romantic, sweet friend, you always write so wonderfully! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Together forever, you do these well. floria |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Well said Interloper...Tanka for this one. Hugs. ~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Interloper, I liked it all except the line about together we shall die...that sounded too much like a pact to me. Good poem Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Sy~ Thanx for the read my friend. Sunshine ~ High approbation from the first lady of Passions is greatly appreciated Apachecat ~ Your first visit to my work. Welcome and thank you for the wonderful comment. SEA ~ Gee, gal, it's too bad we don't have much in common Walker ~ Welcome back! You have been gone too long from my works Startime ~ Yes, it should. Sometimes, however, it is better that it is not  Soliel Noir ~ Welcome to my work. Nice reply. You are certainly allowed your opinion, though I disagree with your premise. dgvarner ~ Thanx for stopping by. I don't get to see you very much. Noah ~ You are so good about reading my poor offerings. Thank you my friend Floria ~ Thank you. I believe this is your first visit to my work. Come back soon. Enchantress ~ You are more than welcome. I appreciate your taking time to read my schtuff. Kethry ~ No, not a pact. Simply a secret dying with the keeper of the secret. Only a thought, not a pact with another human being. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this very much... even if I feel it all too deeply. *S* To love silently is to never reach for and perhaps miss ectasy... but it beats the hell out of having the words rejected and crammed back down your throat. *S* Excellent work! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Suthern ~ Yes, I understand your feelings. I believe we have all felt that way at least once in our life ... yet we will probably die with many such hidden feelings. It is so good to see you visit my pages once again Thank you! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
HiFella~ Now you just know that I know~ Grandma said ... 'Let the secret remain just that'~ I love it when you pour all over the page~  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ OH ... a moment of inspire - Dies a silent death for sure Entombed forever Quiet keep from waiting ears No one else to shed our tears~ Have I told you today ... that I think you're wonderful ? No ? ... well, consider yourself told~ *HUGS* ~*Me*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Marge ~ I just HATE it when you upstage me How I love to see your responses/replies to my works. I love, even more, your wonderful poetry in reply What a wonderful friend you are! ~*~ silence is golden at least that's what we are told but sometimes it hurts ~*~ Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. [This message has been edited by Interloper (01-04-2002 11:33 AM).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
To dream a dream that no one knows to love someone wither they go Such dreams, will die in their own time Perhaps, those ends will show us why. Don't ask me..this just slipped out after reading your poem. By the way, it touched me vey much. Sandra |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
3 words, deeper than deep. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Sandra ~ I am honored and happy Opeth ~ You first visit I think. Welcome and thank you so very much. I try not to get too deep Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. [This message has been edited by Interloper (01-04-2002 11:36 AM).] |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
You inspire: to dwell in your smile would give lingering relief death would then be brief I would stay as a shadow to follow you all my days |
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BrightStar Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 219 |
Simply the most romantic thought. Lovely! Admiring you at Passions. |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Interloper, Oh I LOVE this.. I love tankas.. and you do them well. Thanks for sharing.Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Being a fan of tanka, haiku and such how could i pass by this one..Excellent piece. -------------- |
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heather_kitn Member
since 2001-12-07
Posts 61In The Kokapelli's Song |
I agree...I think everyone has such a "secret" stored away...somewhere......in some way....from some place -heather I do not seek...I find! |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Interloper...you are the master of Japanese poetry. Your senryu are exquisite, this tanka brilliant. I really admire your talent, your gift for the brief and exquisite. ***Ivy Rose |
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Ocelot Junior Member
since 2002-01-07
Posts 40Texas |
Interloper I love the way you say this. It is so true. The ones we love can really never know how much we love them. We can try and show them, try and tell them...but how could they possibly know it all? Kudos, I really like this piece. |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
Such a secret. Here's to a long life... |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
BrightStar ~ Thank you. Tara ~ You weaken my knees. Texas awaits! kitkat ~ It has been so long since last you visited my work. Thank you and don't be a stranger Heather_kitn ` Thanks for the read. I believe your first post to my work. Thank you. Ivy Rose ~ The Tall Texan scuffs his boot in the dirt as his cheeks heat up and murmurs, "Aw, shux, ma'am." Ocelot ~ Thank you Texas gal, thanks a lot! Soliel Noir ~ Welcome back. I'll drink to that Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. [This message has been edited by Interloper (01-08-2002 03:16 PM).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
All I can say is ...... BEAUTIFUL! Maree |
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