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A Sigh from the Crease
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A Sigh from the Crease |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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A Sigh from The Crease The window warped and unwilling drafts a piece of evening into the warm and brings the fragrance of cloud I sit with this small disturbance of air thinking of its travel through the pass that lets in magic Its sound has long fallen around the pine past the cave where the brown bear sleeps and the alder leaves have quieted after the dance that took some twirling There is just a touch of sweet coming from a place unknown to this geography and that is when listening passes the reflection of my face in the glass trying to search a dark that pushes me Back into the room And for just a minute I hear the breath Of time coming from the crease that has folded me into this life for it opened again just long enough for me to hear you sigh [This message has been edited by Martie (01-02-2002 11:45 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, You are one of a kind and a delight to read. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
This is so pretty in a quiet kind of way. I especially liked what you said, when the listening passes and you see your reflection in the glass. I think I'll start my library now.  I suppose we all have our creases in the fold, or perhaps we're folded in the creases. What's a little wrinkle anyway! I so enjoyed your poem Martie, thank you. |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, Martie, gentle one, your images take the mind on a trip of delight that is always so enjoyable...very gentle smile |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
And for just a minute I hear the breath Of time coming from the crease that has folded me into this life for it opened again just long enough for me to hear you sigh Ahhhh Martie, it has been a while that I've heard myself sigh thank you. I love where your poetry takes me.It's so good to read you again. Miss you Maree [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (01-03-2002 03:11 AM).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Martie ... this has really touched me this morning. Incredible description. I could feel the twilight dimension opening as you slipped into the visions just beyond this reality and into the other. This is a dimension that I too, feel is always there and magically allows us to sneak into it ever so gently. This has become one of my favorites of yours, for the warm feeling it brought to my heart this morning, for I understand this feeling ... this experience, that you have described so perfectly. Thank you for this wonderful read Martie.  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
So very quiet...so very fulfilling...the empty rockers are talking, little one... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
There is just a touch of sweet coming from a place unknown to this geography and that is when listening passes the reflection of my face in the glass trying to search a dark that pushes me Back into the room And for just a minute I hear the breath Of time coming from the crease that has folded me into this life for it opened again just long enough for me to hear you sigh ================================== I knew when I saw the title this was gonna be classic Martie poetry.. Now see, -- this is what Im always talking about...the way your mind works... you take an ordinary moment that would have went unnoticed by most...and then turn it into pure poetry... anyone else would just have felt the draft and cursed the "warped window" *L* ...but from you...and that draft of air sneaking in comes THIS!! Like I said...only you. I could throw open my window and let in the 20 degree temps and I would just freeze my mothy butt off before I could write like this   |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I can't possibly improve or even add to the wonderful responses Kit and Janet Marie gave (though I do wish JM would keep her dang 20 degree temperatures to herself and quit sharing them with the deep south! LOL) I can only say I love the thoughts your mind ponders and the incredible poems that result... this is superb! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
ditto JM, now how can I beat what she said, and she is right! I would be right beside her freezing mine LOL. Martie this was truly one of your best (to me) I loved it! ~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
*Soft sigh* from down under where a crease of life becomes a wrinkle in time. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhMyMartie~ Incredible writing !!!!!!! 'Its sound has long fallen around the pine past the cave where the brown bear sleeps and the alder leaves have quieted after the dance that took some twirling' My-My-My~ 'Almost' speechless ... which you know takes some doing~ But ... it's so beautiful as to extract a great big *sigh*~ *Hugs* to you, sweet Sis~ I love you~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
*sigh* Beautifully done, Martie! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ah Martie! You my dear always seem to let the magic in. Beautiful write...soft and gentle as a breeze. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~ |
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