Open Poetry #18 |
Undo Eternity |
Morcastlin Member
since 2002-01-14
Posts 244The Jersey Shore, USA |
Love me, so dark and lonesome is the sky You are my star, you shine brilliant and far Unblinking and fierce, a spark in your eyes No thinking, just pierce my heart 'til it dies Love me, my star, this pure night you will mar Take me away to your heart's galaxy I'll ride a comet-tail to be near you Slide through black holes, dodge a meteor spree Guide my cracked soul to your heavenly sea Race through space, the universe I'll unscrew Even eternity I will undo Just so long as I'm forever with you |
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brianbeaudry Member
since 2001-07-20
Posts 410Northern Ontario Canada |
Even eternity I will undo Just so long as I'm forever with you I loved these lines.....fantastic poem, such devotion penned in the vastness of space!!! |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Lovely Bonnie..nicely done..enjoyed.. Hugs.. ~Victoria~ You can complain because roses have thorns, or you can rejoice because thorns have roses. |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Really nice. The last two lines were great. Nice write. Dave |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Soooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, may you forever be close to the heart of the love of your life and share happiness forever! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is soooooo gorgeous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Bonnie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Oh this is sooooo sweet!!!! Good write!! _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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