Open Poetry #18 |
Candles Melting |
Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Strum the guitar Softly Upon this hesitant soul, That which soars In horizons not Met by the sky I breathe in passionate Stories among your mind Where rainbows and last Snowflakes fall Your music plays Beauty to haunt rose Petals with soft Touch bending Sunlight behind Earth's wall You left time Fractured in a silver Streak, that kisses The mist of meadows And whispers softly Upon flesh I am lost in regard, Reaching past the Storms of pain to Settle along the Shadows edge Still I heard candles Melting as memory Fades within Gentle existence Tomorrow's another day and I'm thirsty any way so bring on the rain [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-19-2002 10:51 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Greeneyes, Beautifully done, I enjoyed the read. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Oh my gosh....your words feel so very tender and soft like the quiet whisper of a single snowflake as it falls...I love it. Absolutely beautiful. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lauren, Such a soothing and tender read. You know how to dispel tension and stress so well! thanks> |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You left time Fractured in a silver Streak, that kisses The mist of meadows And whispers softly Upon flesh I am lost in regard, Reaching past the Storms of pain to Settle along the Shadows edge Still I heard candles Melting as memory Fades within Gentle existence ================================== the kind of melting that warms our soul and lights our night with promises kept ... and the traces left behind. you know that I know --that you know. This is exquisitly you..and another keeper for my treasure chest. It's not like you to say sorry |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
You left time Fractured in a silver Streak, that kisses The mist of meadows And whispers softly Upon flesh Loved those lines Lauren..and the beauty of the whole poem. enjoyed very much ~Victoria~ You can complain because roses have thorns, or you can rejoice because thorns have roses. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lauren sometimes I just don't know what words to say when I read your poetry. I know your soul and how beautiful it is, and the way you write it in words truly touches me. It makes you who you are.....and I really enjoy who you are. Hugs dear Lady. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - I love that guitar as you blended the music and your thoughts into this writing. Excellent. I enjoy reading your poems... BC |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Ooohhhhhh...I love this, this is soooooooo beautiful! (kiss on cheek) Your lovely words dance like snowflakes and kiss the petals of a rose and ignite the beauty of such memories from your loving heart, I love it!!! We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
" I heard candles melting" 0000h sooo nice, I like this. floria |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Lauren, the poem is lovely, I love candles and this is a beautiful thread! Kathleen--(Kay) |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
I have enjoyed this read and the way it leads to the candles that burn. Enjoy listening to candles burn too! Bravo. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lauren~Hush, be still....hear them melting? Lovely....just exquisite! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
outstanding, the last stanza especially. and no, i am NOT going to quote it, you can scroll up i like! -Dave |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
I have to agree with napalm, The last verse is exceptional. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
to hear a candle melt. . . would indeed be to know the secrets of the universe. . . outstanding Lauren. . . truly. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
EXQUISITE POEM!!!! Very well-done. Good poetics here. ***Ivy Rose |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
I love it. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
YES...me thinks you have dones this very very well...like very much... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice...James |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed one of your best |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Lauren, I was left with chills. This is a wonderful piece of work. Not only did it paint a beautiful picture in my mind, your words flowed perfectly. I love it! ~Sheri |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Very well written. I like it. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
This, Lauren, is no ramble ... it trapped me among thoughts of silent memories soft music which they make in my mind, in my heart ... all by the burning candlight of my being, my soul ... tender existence. Well done and thank you for the memories!! |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
What a beautiful poem, Lauren...and what a beautiful sound it must be...to hear candles melting. I heard candles Melting as memory Fades within Gentle existence copyright2002 Lyra Nesius "poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks [This message has been edited by Madame Chipmunk (01-21-2002 09:14 PM).] |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
Excellent poetry. A pleasure to read. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I am more then humbled by these replies....and so blessed to have found passions....please accept my thanks and love to you all..... Lauren~ Tomorrow's another day and I'm thirsty any way so bring on the rain [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-21-2002 10:54 PM).] |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Lauren, I can only wish to write like this. Your thoughts and words are so beautiful.. I enjoy everytime. Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
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