Open Poetry #18 |
Heart's Winter River |
Morcastlin Member
since 2002-01-14
Posts 244The Jersey Shore, USA |
There is a winter river in my heart It's cold and dark and deep with a thick top layer of dirty ice hard as marble that just won't thaw The rest of that beating muscle The place of love within myself is warm and fleshy, full of feeling Missing you, wanting you, always caring Yet, that river crosses through with numb tingling, dead on rushing headlong into bitterness with no refuge My love and caring can't break though the frozen ceiling, or rather, sealing like a watery tomb, this feeling is lost in the wintery river of my heart |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssss) I can feel such sadness in these words, sweet friend, I hope all is great with you now and now your heart is a river in the summer warm with the happiness of love and compassion! (kiss on cheek) All our hearts are with you, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Bonnie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You write my heart....loved this image. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Well done, I hope that the thaw comes soon for you and love swims freely within your heart. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Bonnie, this is very very well done, and I just want you to know that it was thoroughly enjoyed! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Extremely excellent writing on display here...a wonderful image of a heart filled with desire to love being trapped under the pain and heartache of bitter experiences. When love gets hot enough, the ice will melt |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Morcastlin, dont know how I missed this wonderful poem. I hope the sunshine and warmth melt the ice. floria |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Bonnie - Sending a blanket of warm thoughts your way for this wonderful poem. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
chilling and powerful...the cold air of this room I'm in has become even more profoundly cold after reading of the winter river within you....brrrr and the lovely contrast of the part that remembers that special person you're missing is superb. Well done! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Morcastlin Member
since 2002-01-14
Posts 244The Jersey Shore, USA |
Thank you all for your wonderful comments! I'm glad this touched you in some way or another. I wrote this based on our human tendency to let past bad experience hold us back from truly, purely loving others. Love, Bonnie |
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