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Emotional Atrophy
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Emotional Atrophy |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Oh Tin Man, can I be you, for my rusted heart pains me so I’ll gladly give it to you ‘cos I have it just for show I’m tired of this yellow road and begging for drops of oil So please take my squealing heart, so I can end this turmoil My ducts are clogged with debris, so I haven’t cried in years I know Dorothy will never come to drain these murky tears So forget the yellow road, I’m now on the one that’s blue Please come and take my rusted heart, ‘cos Tin Man, I might as well be you |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
ah, but you write a metaphor close to my own heart. Love the references here...and the title, which "drew me in"...nice write! |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* well, dear one.....I remember the tin man and even with no heart he had the biggest heart of all. Don't give up on your heart yet.....please. Life has a way of surprising us all. **big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Apachecat906 Member
since 2001-09-04
Posts 217Michigan, USA |
Dont take this wrong, cuz I mean it as a compliment-this could be a song I know that hollow feeling, too, but I'm still trying to believe in Oz. Great Poem! |
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RosePetal 
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
aw im sure you have a great big wondeful heart! Don't underestimate yourself, there will always be a caring Dorothy out there to comfort you. (hugs) |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
I loved this..an entertaining read indeed..  enjoyed~Victoria~ "To love and be loved is to feel the sun from both sides." |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I enjoyed this very much, Dave....but I know that you have a heart of pure gold, not tin. Your brain, Now thats another story.  Anyone who thinks the pizza is better in NY must have a brain full of tin.  copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Dave darling boy, you KNOW I truly love this one of yours. Just lately, apart from making me sob my eyes out, your writing is getting better and better. IT WAS ALWAYS GOOD, now it's exceptional. Wonderful darling boy just wonderful. I was going to name and shame you in the 'Crying List', but you deserve a poem all to yourself. Now don't tell me darling boy you want me to make your shoulder soggy, I won't believe you. You have a heart as wide as the sky and as deep as the ocean, wonderful references in here love absolutely wonderful   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
I love the sentiment here, great poem. floria |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow, the whole feel of this is so intense, made me want to find you a different road.... and it read like a song....I like that  "...and she swears there's nothing wrong I hear her playin that same ol song"~Fuel~Bad Day [This message has been edited by SEA (01-02-2002 08:56 PM).] |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
I think we've all felt like this at some point in our lives. I like the way you wrote it. Cool title too. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh GenXer, this is so so sad, my heart cries out to yours! (sad sigh) Always believe in yourself, sweet friend, for your heart and spirit is your inner-Wizard of Oz, and you can always be anything in your dreams and hopes, for the Tin Man got his heart, and you can find true happiness too if you look on to the Emerald City behind the clouds! (smiles) We all love you so much, sweet friend, our thoughts and prayer sand love are always with you! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Great write!! *Just click your heels together and repeat, 'there's no place like home...there's no place like home.* ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~ |
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Mac Attack Member
since 2001-12-12
Posts 100Ontario, Canada |
I sincerly wish your Dorothy will soon arrive with an endless supply of oil to ease the strain on your heart. Great post. |
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N orth Carolina Girl Senior Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 962NC,USA |
Dave,this was the closest I could find for Toto.My grandson watched the Wizard of Oz with me and fell in love with it and he is only 2.FOLLOW THE YELLOW BRICK ROAD!    Juanita |
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His Poet Senior Member
since 2001-12-18
Posts 750 |
Dave, your poetry is blossoming. I enjoyed all your work at MTC but I'm seeing much more intense feelings and expressions here. Wonderful pieces you're writing and I love all of the Oz references. Great job. Cheryl |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Thanks to Cheryl, for bringin this to my attention. It sound as if some refreshing life-giving drops are on the way, to lubricate your body and soul and make you whole. |
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Hypnosis Member
since 2001-12-02
Posts 325CO |
So sad, I hate to see people sad. Well the tin man found his heart, i'm sure you can fix yours to pump love again. Good write. Randy Meador a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living. |
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Ocelot Junior Member
since 2002-01-07
Posts 40Texas |
So sad yet so full of passion. Kudos, |
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His Poet Senior Member
since 2001-12-18
Posts 750 |
Dave, just wanted your tin man to be near Dorothy. |
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