Open Poetry #18 |
Last Moments |
brianbeaudry Member
since 2001-07-20
Posts 410Northern Ontario Canada |
Last Moments Vision blurring, I’m feeling faint. Sirens pierce the chilled night air with the ominous premonition of urgency. As I look down on the heap of twisted, tortured metal and plastic that was once a luxurious vessel of transport. It’s fluids spilling, painting abstracts in their quest for level ground onlookers gape and stare in awe and shock Mumbling and groaning their despair yet unable to avert their gaze or give privacy to the last few seconds of this soul’s earthly presence Paramedics push their way through and firemen pull and cut away the last remaining barriers to prying eyes only to expose more of me to the multitude of ghouls anxious to see but unable to bare the visions that unfold. Be gone!!Leave me privy to my last few moments on this mortal plane. Have I not given you enough of myself in life that now you have to rob me of the privacy of my lastprayer? Have I not suffered enough by your hunger and thirst for gossip and idle innuendoes that you need my final breath also? I try to hold my head high, proud, defiant to their insult but get no response from my seeping mangled limbs I weep and voice my disdain on deaf ears, ignored, defiled Why should I ask for now that which was denied me in life? I gave you love and got back rumor, joy and received heartbreak, life and was denied my own. The pain is fading now as is the light, I cease to care anymore for the transgressions afflicted me. I feel warm again, loved, needed for the first time in oh so very long. I feel peace. Why do they try so hard to save that which is already saved. Leave me to continue this journey. Of all you have taken of me grant me this. I have at last found a place of love and peace. I’ll let no-one stay me this transition. Of all you have taken from me, I leave you my love, memories of good deed and caring. Weep not for me for I am finally free. Brian Beaudry(Dedication to Lady Di) [This message has been edited by brianbeaudry (01-18-2002 05:24 PM).] |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
My dear Brian,,, I knew instantly the first few lines, I said, this is for Diana. I was and am such an admirer of her strength. Her beauty inside and out and oh how she was hunted down for the almighty dollar. When she died I stayed up all night to watch the news and I cried. I miss her. And I love this tribute to her, It is nice to know she is not forgotten. floria |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
brian, dear Lady Di, so sweet, I miss her honest smile. Well done. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
A very chilling but compassionate write, Brian. You write the way you photograph, with vivid clarity, always focussed sharply on the image you seek to project. I'm always repulsed by the frenzy of the media in their attempt to 'get the picture and the story.' And you've done an excellent job with such a difficult piece of history. Lady Di would probably be pleased with the respect for privacy you have poignantly requested for a dying soul. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful Brian. I would say more but the words can't seem to get past the lump in my throat. Great write with vivid imagery! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Brian Your words sent shivers down my spine as I recalled that dreadful day when the whole world stopped. Such a beautiful and gracious woman who never asked for much, other than a normal life which she never got. May she finally be at peace now. Take care.......Sue Suetang |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Brian, this is so so sad, I am now flooding in tears just remembering the image I saw on the TV when we lost our sweet princess! (big hugggssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, she is a very loving person and deep down, she will always be in our hearts, a princess of true beauty! We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is such a heartaching but beautiful tribute! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Brian, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shin epuon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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poeticdreamer Junior Member
since 2002-01-17
Posts 46 |
Bravo Brian, this is truly a great tribute in a poem of reality for a more than lovely princess of caring! poeticdreamer |
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rebekah33 Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 140MD/NJ |
What a wonderful tribute! The last line was an amazing ending. Absolutely beautiful! -R. "So stop and love and dance and live and laugh until you cry" Edwin McCain |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
Brian, this is very powerful writing in the first person. I like the way the form of the poem falls with it centered. It almost seems to suggest a feminine figure and it accents the poem visually. A few edits where words are enjambed against each other would make it read easier. Overall I ditto the comments as to the power of this work to emote and draw emotions from the reader. Very good handling of delicate theme. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
what an emotional poem. Right now, I feel I have no emotions. A person gets that way after so long, writing, reading, writing, reading, writing, reading, but this, I enjoyed. Kathleen--(Kay) |
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