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Masked Intruder

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since 1999-05-23

Posts 1231
Near golden sunsets

0 posted 2001-11-27 03:59 AM

Frozen wind plays off my panes
In compulsive beats and blows;
Darkened clouds stir incensed
Disrupting this silent repose.

In fickle spurts and quiet flashes
Dry lightning strikes my eyes;
The thunder rolls thickly behind these ears,
Enlightening my blackened skies.

A calm is broken, my memory stained
With the flavor of tasteless events;
Fate unrolled in illtimed revulsion
Embroiled by horrific pretense.

~~~

These feelings abate with languorous breaths
As I sink into Avalon's mist.
Heartbeats come steady in slowed volutions
As I sleep with dreamland's tryst.

You can't wake a person who is pretending to be asleep. -- Navajo Proverb

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2001-11-27 05:04 AM

Well I loved every line, especially the dry lightning striking the eyes.

~Wynter

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart.
It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul."
(J.Garland)

Ryan
Member

since 1999-06-10

Posts 297
Kansas

2 posted 2001-11-28 12:20 PM

Alas, it cannot thunder anymore. Now it can just snow and be cloudy. Oh the hard life. Nice poem too.

Rearrange the letters in poem and replace the m with an n and you get peon. Hehe, interesting.

Ryan

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

3 posted 2001-11-28 12:25 PM

well oh wow, this is intense, and so powerful....it takes a different meaning for me.....powerful nonetheless.....

be well be safe

Greeneyes~

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 11-28-2001).]

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

4 posted 2001-11-28 12:27 PM

Hi lovie, a day late and a dollar short, but it's okay, I'm with the band! I love this, as I love your style, but am contemplating your fascination with looking OUT---there's doors yanno? go out there and mingle with the dark....and if you're not back in five days? we'll send a search party...(I'll be the one with the flask tied about my neck!)

*hic* oh. empty. sorry.

peaches73533
Senior Member

since 2001-11-04

Posts 981
OK, USA

5 posted 2001-11-28 12:31 PM

Interesting write.
Peaches

RosePetal

Member Elite

since 2001-08-26

Posts 2985
South Florida

6 posted 2001-11-28 12:45 PM

Hey!! Long time no see! How are ya? Your poems are always so interesting. They really draw me in to your world.
Stop in more often sweetie!

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

7 posted 2001-11-28 01:48 AM

Great imagery here.
"In fickle spurts and quiet flashes
Dry lightning strikes my eyes;
The thunder rolls thickly behind these ears,
Enlightening my blackened skies."
Amazing how nature can slap you around a bit and make you think of all that goes on in this world, the good, the bad, and the ugly (OK so I stole that line)

An interesting write. Thanks.

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