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From the Journal, early 1969, #2
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From the Journal, early 1969, #2 |
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Sunshine
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From the Journal, early 1969, #2 To write as they, like Rod McKuen or Dylan for myself to share with you ~ would mean to be them and I am me. So I write what I am nothing more than a woman of youth. Their age lets them see to write more ~ imagination grips my pen. I can sail on a cloud through the windy sea of airy blueness ~ never falling to Mother Earth. Or I am chained, bound to Her as a fresh new green leaf to a spring tree. But I will escape; a few short months of blossoming, ripening, letting fruit fall to my bed beneath ~ Old Man Age touches me and I wither, coloring my home one last time ~ my final farewell shall be through beauty. I am the booming waves crashing majestically across grains of worn years. I swell, grow high, break from the green wall and fall into my lacy white, salty foam of minute creatures that created life ~ way back when. Or I can be me, wondering why my eyes are green and wide ~ not brown and slanted. Or why my golden brown hair isn’t straight raven black or kinky. Or why I was born into a free land when many more are miserable. ©Karilea Rilling Jungel circa 1969 24 November 2001 |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
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Ah, the days of youth. How do these words feel now? (just curious not malicious). was that Dylan Thomas or Bob Dylan? "Happy people have no history" - French Proverb |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Karilea, I really am enjoying these from your Journal. I sit here for several minutes after reading one....remembering.... ~Life may not be the song you requested, |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Kari, I liked this a lot...but I have a particular fondness for narrative work especially Rod Mcuen...I just can't write it. Only one small criticism why didn't you write old woman age since the rest of it was female. Be well Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
so true...to write as someone else is to not be yourself...and yourself is very good!  This one is liked....  |
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PoetriPrincess Member
since 2001-11-17
Posts 55CA / U.S.A |
That was different, I also agree with Balladeer. Just curious, What was your motivation for this piece? Sometimes, long walks on the beach motivate me. Friends & Poems, |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I love this. And it is great that you have saved it to re-visit the thoughts after a handful of years. Your spirit is the same, your words and style have become full blossoms. I also wondered, which Dylan, just curiosity, as either/both would work well for me. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
It's so interesting to go back over what we wrote many years ago and bring back the memories of where we were and what we were thinking at the time. I love doing that on a lazy day, and just reflecting, bringing back past thoughts and loves. I may just go digging through some of my archives tomorrow. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
No criticism here....I just think its a neat and sophisticated poem....very nice write! Nathan |
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Sunshine
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Very interesting comments! I will try to answer the questions as best I can... RSWells, if I recall, it was a reference to both Dylans, and I thought I was being clever, I'm sure. About this time I would have been in English Lit in my senior year and it seemed everything I gave to my instructor received an A. But I did not have great regard for this woman as I had been under her tutelage for two years prior when she taught French, and neither of us were happy with that experience. I am also highly critical of myself, so throwing this out here now was both a purge and an experiment...thank you for reading... Enchantress, if I can make your day pleasant, than I've succeeded at something...thank you!... Kethry, that is a very good question. I was never really into women's lib, which was just beginning to rumble in '69. I always thought if a woman could do a man's job, she should receive equivalent rewards. And that was about the extent of it. To my knowledge, and hopefully not in my lifetime, birthing will be left to us. Some things should be as they are. But back to your question...the answer being, because I didn't know better? Thanks for reading... Balladeer, that is a wonderful compliment. Thank you Very Much! PoetriPrincess, Welcome to Passions. My inspiration? I am not sure. I made no notes in the margins and you're asking me to think back some 30+ years... I think I was probably alone that day, and have always had this desire to make words paint pictures. Everything is an experiment, and I am sure I was doing then just as I am doing now...experimenting with my bag of words...thank you for reading! Midnitesun, several months ago I thought I had lost this journal. At first I was very upset with myself for being careless...then I was mad because I knew in my heart I would never be able to recreate the words in the book that is before me now. Never, Ever, throw anything you've written, away...thank you for reading! Tracey, it is indeed interesting to go back and try to figure out why you wrote something. I think I shall start making notations as to what the inspiration was for certain pieces at different times, because if I'm going to be quizzed about 30 years ago, I think I'd better come up with better answers! Thank you for reading! Nate, you Dogg, where HAVE you been? Good to see you! Thanks for reading! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Karilea...This poem shows the great degree of creative ability that you had within you 30 plus years ago... AWESOME... All I was doing was worrying about whether I was getting married in June of that year. (I Did) And we still are.....Not saying we have not gone thru hell together... Just stubborn and stick together...kidding to a degree.. Your poetry makes me think back to that year....Lots happening... Maybe you will inspire my thoughts to write my own 1969, for that was the year I was LEGAL..(21)...See..no spring chicken here. Enjoyed this, thank you. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
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~What a treat. I'm glad you held on to this so closely. To know it was written years ago, holds so much to reflect and wonder with, thank you. *Peace. |
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