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What Was It? |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia 
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You whispered words of love, sweet words, of a love so true. Now I need to know how to make it without you. You said you couldn’t live without me by your side. You didn’t find it hard to leave the past behind. What was it that I did to make you turn away? Tell me what I can do to change your mind today. Your offer of friendship was accepted willingly. I only took from you what you freely gave to me. When you offered me love I took too long to decide. Now when I need you most you’re not here by my side. What was it that I did to make you turn away? Tell me what I can do to change your mind today. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
such a delicately written feeling poem... good things are waiting to happen... they always are... regards, sudhir |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Tender ponderings, and a lovely cadence and rhyme Dee ... beautifully written!  Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sometimes all we can do is accept things for what they are. Nothing you could ever do could change this person's mind. They are the only one who can do that. It isn't about you, it's about them. Good write. All writing comes |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Feed me chocolate. Dee, sweet lass.... Very good honest write. I believe friends can be far and not always available but if you keep them close to your heart then they are always near. Parker |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
sometimes. . . there's nothing you can do. . . but move on. . . well done here. . . strong emotions. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Sudhir, I know good things can be just around the corner or on the other side of the world. I just have to have patience. Kit, thank you. It surprises me sometimes what deep thought can bring about. Lone Wolf, I am what I am and I would never change for anyone. So tell me Parker, what sort of chocolate?  I have found true friends are always there in spirit at least. Sven, I am slowly moving on...... Thanks.Thank you all. Your encouragement means a lot to me. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Dee, I hope you get your friend back. I sincerely do. I also hope to receive a letter from you soon, sweet friend. (((hugs))) love ya, Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Dee - a most tender, heartwarming, and emotional poem. I enjoyed reading and feeling the words... BC |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Vandana, thank you for reading. Bill, glad this had an impact on you. Thanks. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Why do we hesitate to say what we feel? Are we sure? Love has so many questions within those four letters of a single word. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
it's never easy when one changes their mind and the other doesn't.... hurts... you wrote it well.. the most important thing is that the love which was shared will never really die... but will always live within both hearts... forever... the memories will stay alive to treasure that and move forward is the only answer thanks for a pensive, emotive read |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
beautiful bittersweet rhymes of the heart Dee-girlie. lessons of the heart are always the ones we learn the hard way.  heart-hugs jm "If I could fly ... I'd pick you up ... I'd take you into the night ... |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
Very nice To the library it goes Bernie A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Magnus, so many questions and so few answers Doreen, I think the hardest part is moving on. Janet, I guess we will learn eventually. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
There is a path that will rise to meet you and take the pains away. It is all just a matter of not giving up on finding that path. You expressed your feelings well in this piece but then again, you usually do. I am truely delighted to have found one by you as your cadence and style are always in the elite class of poets. Well written and so very honest as well and DON'T EVER GIVE UP HOPE. Be well my friend. |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Mark, it always makes me smile to see your comments on my poems. Thank you for such high praise, it is appreciated. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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