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The Bonsai of Me
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The Bonsai of Me |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia 
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Close your eyes and you shall see the layers of life, the bonsai of me. Twisted branches curving gracefully, gnarled by life sagaciously. I tried to fight the twists and turns, the ties that bound, forcing me to be un-naturally me. Yet somehow in the end what you see is the true, the bonsai of me in all my twisted imagery. May the ripple of LOVE become the wave of PEACE [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (edited 11-20-2001).] |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
Great use of imagery here.And even after all that been twisted and turned you are a beautiful person inside and out. Peaches |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Peaches, thank you for your kind comments. |
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Dennis Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 235Indiana |
this reminded me of being overseas in Japan when I was in the navy, neat feeling hadn't thought about bonsai in quite some time. Dennis |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Midnitesun, Very nicely done. I like the comparison here.  LW All writing comes |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Ohhh I like this very much, great imagery and rhyme, very well written, thank you. Regards, Olias. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Dennis, nice to meet you. Glad it stirred a memory, hopefully pleasant. Lone Wolf, thank you, glad you enjoyed. Olias, thanks, and nice to meet you. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
a very original image here Midnitesun. . . comparing the twists and turns of life to the twists of a bonsai tree. . . if only life were as simple, or as complex. . . well done. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Thank you for your comments, Sven. It takes many years and often many hands to shape a bonsai, as does life's journey. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Nicely said, Alaskan girl. Even midgets can be beautiful...  |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Awesome write, here.I like this imagery lots Sandra |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Dear Kacy, you know what I do see In this tree that you call “me” A lady who’s lived life to full And one who’s heart is beautiful Your eyes see laughter, hearts felt pain Your love of life will never wane In this life you take such joy (And hey, you pointed out my dear toy boy!!) I like your twisted imagery. May you always share it here If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I MEAN MINIATURES!!!!!! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Sandra, glad you liked it. Balladeer, LOL at your midget/mini comments. You are such a card! (Joker? or King of Hearts?) Tracey, what a sweetheart! But my twisting and turning has just begun.... And I'm smiling big time at the toy reply.  Glad to see you back on board. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Midnitesun, Appears I showed up too late to ask if this is your mini-me poem. LOL Or are you the twisted sister? ROTFLMAO Okay, okay...it is an insightful little you. I'm sorry...I just can't help myself. ROTFLMAO! [This message has been edited by Larry C (edited 11-20-2001).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
ROTFLMAO, Larry, you twisted me outta my chair in laughter again! Now I really do look like a bonsai! Ouch, my back hurts now, just twisted a little too far that time. Twisted sister...that's an image I hadn't considered when I posted this. Should have known you would twist it around into something funny.  HAHAHAHA |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Bonsai's are really interesting to look at...James |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
By the time I read all your responses I've forgotten what I want to say. lol It's good to see you writing about yourself, though the attention you pay to all of us...is much appreciated! And since seeing Tracey's post, I will also thank you...ya little matchmaker. Your heart is certainly not in miniature. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Oh you do a good job with those twists and turns Midnitesun. This was exceptional and I loved your title. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
James, glad you enjoyed. Yes, bonsai's are fascinating. Duncan, LOL. Calling me a yenta now, are ya? All I did was offer someone a little hint. You are to blame for the consequences.  Blues Serenade, what a great comment! glad you enjoy these twists and turns. |
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Ven Member
since 2001-10-01
Posts 102U.K. |
There's nothing I can say that has not already been said so I'll just add, very nice work and thanks for the read. Much enjoyed, Ven |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Ven, thanks for reading about my gnarly twists and turns. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
most enjoyable... regards, sudhir |
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wornways Member
since 2001-10-18
Posts 204CA, USA |
well, the title of this one drew me in to reading it, despite it's overworn  22 comments. for some reason i don't like reading poems that have been commented on a lot, makes me feel all mainstream and weird. but, this one, great title, first of all. and, the imagery that went with the idea -- perfect match. expression, exquisite... i feel you may have accomplished exactly what you wished for in writing this piece. again, great title. really dig the title. the title is almost a poem in and of itself.WARNING: this reader is not prone to terse, canned comments. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Ah Midnitesun ... beautiful metaphor! What a wonderful perspective you've capture on life in this creative piece, very much enjoyed your imagery and sentiments! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Sudhir, thank you for the visit. wornways, I appreciate your candid rather than canned comments. The title projects an image I've thought about for a long time, and I have always loved the bonsai form. And I agree, a title can be worth a great picture and a thousand words. Maybe that's why I didn't call it the pretzel of me, and go with that twisted imagery. LOL. Thanks you for sharing your thoughts. Kit, I'm glad that you read and enjoyed the metaphor. Each year the metaphorically twisted physical image of me gets closer to reality when I look in the mirror or attempt to do yoga or other exercises. [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (edited 11-22-2001).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You accept criticism, hey? Well here's a critique of the highest form... IWIHWT!!! Brava! Enjoyed! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Why Sunshine, that really is a super comment. You could have, I just beat you to it. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Pruned to perfection! I must say a clever metaphor! A wonderful interpretation to the arduous task of nurturing oneself into what they mean to be. You are unique and lovely! Sincerely, Regina It's all in the mind |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Regina, thanks for the comment. As I said elsewhere, I am this metaphor in many ways. And the bonsai offered a better visual image than a twisted pretzel. Who knows, maybe I'll still write about the twisted pretzel someday, but you'll need a mug of beer to swallow that metaphor. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I loved this poem. Bonsais are well cultivated , strong, and interesting. So is your poetry Liz |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Flattery will get you an extra hug, sweet Elizabeth. Yes, and bonsais are also patient.  |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
I love this one is perfect. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Walker, nice to see you today. Thanks for the comment.  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
The Bonsai is as unique as you Kacy! I thoroughly enjoyed this piece! Hope yours has been a wondeful Thanksgiving. ~hugs, Nancy~ ~Life may not be the song you requested, |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Nancy, thank you so much. Yes, it has been a good day. I had much to be thankful for today. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Midnitesun- I really enjoyed the whole idea of this... "the bonsai of me" Very creative, and wonderfully done. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 11-28-2001).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Vicky, so nice to see you again. Thank you for your reply, I am very happy that you enjoyed this. |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Well, I have thought of myself as a tree from time to time, or tried to, and I have given bonsai a go, but I hadn't thought of it all quite like this. But it is like this. Thanks for your perspective. "As soon as the generals and the politicos can predict the motions of your mind, lose it." Wendell Berry |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Very nicely done. Thank you for sharing it. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Krawdad, so nice to have you visit. What kind of tree would you be? And did you have success with your bonsai? Smartchick, glad you enjoyed. Thanks for the comment. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Midnite..enjoyed this look into the see of you...I love Bonsai. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Martie, hello. Thanks for that line the "see" of me. It's great! SEA will probably want that line. |
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