Open Poetry #17 |
The Wall |
OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
The Wall Shadows burnt of you upon the wall, caught in vogues vision contrived, Sooty feathers fold about the chalk line, from boy to man, Wishing we could have met at four feet two, you could have been the girl next door, Instead plaster defaced love hearts trace the tracks of my tears, And what of dreams ambition, before we met, They too are there, displayed in torn and faded Idols, Until you, there was always second best, for some I was that man, But through it all the wall remains, Paint and paper can't disguise the truth, Memories set in stone, endure. Olias. |
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Carol Lina Member
since 2001-11-18
Posts 94USA |
yes, in stone...very close to my thoughts today. Carolina |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* I get a sense of sadness and regret coming from these words you write so well. Will love be able to take down the wall that memories have built? I pray for you that they can and that you may move on having wiped away all traces of the tears you've shed. **hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. [This message has been edited by Startime (edited 11-19-2001).] |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
I hope this wall is not permanent, Olias. Very sad write. All writing comes |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Carol Lina, Thanks for your kind words, and on a happier note maybe memories like foundations built on stone can weather any storm. I hope you find solice in that. Startime, I am very touched by your reply, this is a wall I find alot of compfort in, like an old pair of sneakers, take care. Lone Wolf, Thanks for reading and replying it is very much appreciated, be well. Thank you to all, Regards, Olias. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I do not know why, but this gave me chills, so I shall put it in my library, to read again... thank you! |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Hmmm very interesting way of looking at it, and after a read I see what you mean it is quite macabre. Thanks for the reply and the point of view Sunshine. Regards, Olias |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hmmm....not quite macabre...just dark and brooding...and? I like it that way! This one ACHED. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
You captured that feeling of faded memories so beautifully, Olias... Shadows burnt of you upon the wall, caught in vogues vision contrived, Sooty feathers fold about the chalk line, from boy to man, I loved the edginess of this poem, its so very raw. copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
innocence lost. . . still. . . well done my friend. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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