Open Poetry #17 |
Me in Me |
wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
The hidden word In “me” is me Its good it rhymes With poetry I’ll write the words You’ve torn apart And hold the shreds Up to my heart The masking tape In time, repairs The fact that I Have words to share Words of life That imitate A dying art I learn to hate For if I make It “me” in me Then I must not Care what you see I’ll only heal And stave remission If its all for me My only mission For now, I'll stop And say “The End” I know in time My heart will mend [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 11-18-2001).] |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Walt, this was filled with pain. The shorter lines work well for you I think! Gives your work an edge.... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well, my good Walt....I've read this three times, and have borrowed three different thoughts from it... when you can do that, you are in my book! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ah Walt! I really like this! But, if feels so sad. This style works well for you. Good write. ~hugs, Nancy~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*hugs* for your sadness and a to put a smile on your face. This is great writing though very sad. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
another vivid picture walt! very real, and all flows so fluidlee. remember whenever the stooges say; "mememememememememe," when they are warming up for a musical performance? anyways, i hope "you" get as much out of your poetree as "me," and me. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Ya'll do boost me |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Walt, I also like this form on you The poem is wonderful.. painful.. but wonderful. Muchly liked. Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I have to agree with the above walt, and so I "boost" you again, back to the top with you! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I love this style too, Walt! Very well done! |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
I too read many things in this. Still you are multi faceted and I always enjoy your point of view. Fresh as usual..but I do wish you happiness. Hugs! Sincerely, Regina It's all in the mind Except for what's in the heart. http://www.mygem.net/heartquill [This message has been edited by rwood (edited 11-25-2001).] |
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