Open Poetry #17 |
My Love ..... (deVine's challenge) |
Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
My Love My Love My Love Oh where is night without your kiss The bliss the bliss the bliss The touch of heaven with your skin Within within within Lonely is this cold and empty bed Oh dread oh dread oh dread The silken sheets like Roses blush The lust the lust the lust A fallen glass of ruby wine Denied denied denied The wait and rush of heated touch The crush the crush the crush The wetness of your baited breath Caress caress caress The slick and slide of heated flesh Oh death oh death oh death The moments of the nights gone past The flash the flash the flash This letter to a wild and fallen dove My love my love my love. James Parker Haley Dec 28, 2001 |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"The bliss the bliss the bliss" YOWSER...am I getting off or what? (don't answer that!) The repetition in your verse lent very well to true emotion. Good to see you here again! Very passionate, mon cherie! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh my! Oh my! Oh my! WOW...the words just won't come.... but I love this. Hugs, Nancy *~ Wishing everyone a New Year filled with Peace & Love ~* |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Hey Handsome, makin my poor heart swoon tonight.....mmmmmmm...so nice...challenge--blown out of the water my dear [This message has been edited by SEA (12-28-2001 09:43 PM).] |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
I love it, I love it, I love it! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The sigh ... the sigh ... the sigh ... the swoon ... the swoon ... the swoon ... the pedestals ... the pedestals ... the pedestals ... you do know how cool this poem is dont you? very very very cool P-man the repetitive lines...the word play...the poetic phrashing and vocab... Poetry in motion sweet tease ... aint it just like you to slip in here and quietly hang the moon. When your own emptiness is all thats getting through |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A fallen glass of ruby wine Denied denied denied The wait and rush of heated touch The crush the crush the crush The wetness of your baited breath Caress caress caress The slick and slide of heated flesh Oh death oh death oh death ============================== forgot to put this in me library .... OH and lets talk about how you denied denied denied us HEARING this one with one of your recitals... now Im left begging ... begging ... begging... LOL see what you've started ...swooning and stuttering |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
WOW!!!Now this poem is filled with passion. Magnificent. I love it. **hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
unusual read, a heavy romance well described!! |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"The wetness of your baited breath Caress caress caress The slick and slide of heated flesh Oh death oh death oh death" came back for some more....you've been gone far too long.... |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Thank you everyone for your replies.... I had replied to everyone separately but some new option here said I put to many smiling faces and then deleted everything I wrote. They probably would have censored me to the ladies anyway....lol. Parker |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
email me mine |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Parker, delight, delight, delight...is there an echo in here. Anyway this is a poem that bears repeating. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
A beautiful poem - it lends itself to singing I think. And yes, there is a limit on smilies now! Sorry. Into the library with this gem! |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Dear me!!! This is really nice, I like your style too! Now, if only I can write something like that for the challenge. _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hey Parker..Loved this very romantic and emotion laced poem! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Mmmmmmm...very sensually romantic, sweet friend, your repetition in your love poem expresses such emphasis on beauty! (sigh) You are sooooooo romantic, sweet friend, we all love you so very much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Parker, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Ok from the top again. serenity, thank you. I do drop by and peek in every other day.... hmmm does that mean I'm a passions voyuer... Nancy, oh thank you oh thank you oh thank you. SEA, thank you sweety. blown out of the water? skinny dipping again I hope. (sly smile here) walker, thank you very much. Janet, I never get tired of repetition.... the hours the hours the hours. (very coy smile here) Janet back again for more. (big smile) Startime, thank you I needed to write something getting rusty....errr only at writing. (smile) ecrivan, well thanks. SEA, my mind has been lost in computers all year can't write. the shame the shame the shame. (sad smile here) SEA, (big smile here) Kethry, thanks thanks thanks. Poet deVine, thank you. a quota on smiles... damn what is the world coming to. Mon Cherie, well I'm sure we'd all like to see you try. (smile) Martie, thank you so much, always nice to see your replies to my stuff. (smile) Mistletoe Angel, thanks very much. Parker [This message has been edited by Parker (12-29-2001 01:27 PM).] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Lovely, Park. We've got to find you that Irish lass to warm up that bed, don't we??? cor |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Passionate....YES...YES...YES... Nice one Parker...well done.. |
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Bec Member
since 2001-02-23
Posts 475Canberra |
Parker... This is fantastic! I love it! The words just aren't coming, but rest assured it's a great piece! Bec "Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you. And all you can do is to go where they can find you." |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
WOW!!!! PASSIONATE I can feel the heat of your passion, the strength of your love in this poem. ****Ivy Rose |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
So this is for Sharon's challenge, is it, Park? And no one has tried to claim it?? Well then I would be remiss if I didn't say "Pick me, oooh, pick me" Loved it, my friend, but then you know I love the way you write romance. Makes me feel like I am missing something. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Great to see something new from you!! This is cool, cool cool... Baby loves it!!!!! Ans it makes my New Year! Me It is a blessing to have wings for words and passion in pen. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corinne, now your talking... cause that bed can get kind of cold... do you have a twin sister... Magnus, thanks thanks thanks. Bec, well thats ok, these words didn't come for months. (smile) Ivy Rose, thank you but I have to admit that sometimes its just about the poem and not the poet. Dee, but you are, come by and I'll show your. (smile) Marina, thanks, but if that baby doen't stop its going to get a rash. lol Parker |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
What are you going to show me, Park? The lights maybe? Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Parker This is stunning Very emotional write I loved it Liz |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
Lonely is this cold and empty bed Oh dread oh dread oh dread The silken sheets like Roses blush The lust the lust the lust ... The wetness of your baited breath Caress caress caress The slick and slide of heated flesh Oh death oh death oh death The moments of the nights gone past The flash the flash the flash This letter to a wild and fallen dove My love my love my love. ======================================== mmm....this one really likes me.... do it again....! gonna recite this?? yes?? waiting..............new forum is open....just slide this one on over there...move in close...whisper....ah..the thoughts of it.. hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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