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SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

0 posted 2001-12-23 12:20 PM

Tomorrow is the throbbing
and one step (another) leaves my stomach behind,
trailing - creeping up in straight lines.
It spills in cycles and rises inside, swirling.
I fear swallowing so much I’ll collapse.
I have.
Today, it loses just a little.
Because I try, and it isn’t quite tomorrow yet.
Though one again to follow only hurts,
only leaves me two in debt again.
And one of these tomorrows it will be.
Today.
Skip. Skip. - A crash. I know.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2001-12-23 12:36 PM

I fear swallowing so much I’ll collapse.
I have.
Today, it loses just a little.
Because I try, and it isn’t quite tomorrow yet.
Though one again to follow only hurts,
only leaves me two in debt again.
And one of these tomorrows it will be.
Today.
===========================

good grief...this was like a mirror...
have you been peeking thru this screen

too bad we cant leave the fears and dread behind with that knot in our stomachs ..
*sigh*
lots of angst in this succinct sharp write A.
heart-hugs
jm

You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do.
Thats the way love is ... sky blue and black.

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

2 posted 2001-12-23 12:37 PM

Yes, I truly admire and love your writing, it is excellent to read something of such depth.

Kathleen (Kay)
"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

3 posted 2001-12-23 12:48 PM

My understanding of this poem was very personal and perhaps very different from your intended meaning. I found it intriguing. Something I'd like to have coffee over and discuss. Though, I will settle for telling you that I enjoyed it very much.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

4 posted 2001-12-23 12:56 PM

There have been many days I wanted to skip over, and go to the next one.
"It spills in cycles and rises inside, swirling.
I fear swallowing so much I’ll collapse.
I have."
Me too. Hugs, and have a wonderful warm holiday, sweet Spitfire. You always touch my mind and heart.

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

5 posted 2001-12-23 01:29 AM

i love the abstract nature of this one..
and a new pic since last i read you...

enjoyed

hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

"tomorrow's another day, and i'm thirsty anyway--so bring on the rain!"

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

6 posted 2001-12-23 07:13 AM

Spitfire,
this reminds me of the saying...I try to take one day at a time but lately several days have ganged up on me. Only your poem is more profound.
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

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