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Smooth Like Satin
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Smooth Like Satin |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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Smooth like satin clinging to each curve sashaying through the breezeway a fabric of words cut away at the seams traced in a silhouette outlines in a feminine shape translucent in lacey nylon sewn into velvet draped in a cape defusing the light seen through chiffon. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This poem is smooth and soft, velvety to the tongue when read out loud. Nicely done! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You are so sweet to say so Midnitesun. But I think I will take this back to the drawing board and work on it a bit more. (or a lot more)  Thank you so much for reading. |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
I think you've done a great job! As I read, I could just recall the feel of satin over skin. It's so sensual...  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Look forward to the rewrite, and what you might do with this... |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
This is beautiful...I love the way it felt as I read it. Very well done. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
Your words are smooth as satin. Peaches |
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