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Swan Song
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Swan Song |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
The crescendo, a distant memory, as the piano plays on ever so softly, with sullen sounds emanating from the keys from the soft touch of ebony and ivory The empathizing notes know too well how to latch onto feelings you can’t dispel Keeping you mired in its emotive tune as your tears fall beneath the icy moon Preying on your weakened and battered spirit Only your last breathe will make it remit As the musical notes imbue your spine Slumped over ~ it plays endlessly in your mind And when the last tear traverses down your face, and the swan sails off with beauty and grace, the harps will then join in the finale Allowing your tormented soul to be set free © David 2001 |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
delete please [This message has been edited by ecrivan (12-22-2001 01:27 PM).] |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Quite lovely, imagery wise...inspired by Swanlake? one does get roundshouldered at the piano too, lol. Happy holidays to you!!  |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This poem is so very beautiful, Dave... I really loved the imagery... and I am so glad that you came over here to this site to post some of your poetry.  and now, I can make all of your nightmares come true with my snotty replies  but this one is just too good! Please write a bad one...so I can at least be a little bit sarcastic.   You are making things very difficult for me by posting such beautiful poems!  copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Thanks Martin, and happy holidays to you as well. By the way, I can't believe the queen needs somebody to change her lightbulbs. That is riduculous. Dave |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Lyra - You are too funny. Believe me I have plenty of bad writes. I can send you some via e-mail if you like. They are all on my hard drive just dying for someone to read them.lol   Wow, the faces here are very lively. I am not sure if I can handle all this action. Thanks for reading. Dave |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed this swan song David...James |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh David, this is soooooo beautiful, what a wonderful emotional declaration of introspection and freedom! (sigh) Sooooooo beautiful, may we all spread our hearts wings and fly for love! (smiles) I love it, sweet friend! (big hugggsssss) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet David, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
James, Noah, thank you both for checking this out. Dave |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Dave darling boy, Okay lock me up For you dear heart I'll bring out the handcuffs This poem it is UTTERLY utterly fabulous, I adore the images in this. Why do you have to write sooooooooooo incredibly well love. I still say there is a conspiracy afoot, you are all in league against me to make me sob. Well that is it, you now have to make me smile or else I'll be round to see you. This is said in my best whisper in a menacing manner You are not supposed to go around turning the lights down low, and arranging a cosy meal for two. But if you're offering tea, I only drink it in the morning (wink) I love it this really is absolutely beautiful  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 [This message has been edited by Marsha (12-22-2001 05:21 PM).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Dave, well, well...look what the duckling did...became a Swan that captured my heart, as did the music in the write. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
David, I'm gonna love your poetry I can tell  This was muchly enjoyed.Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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DarkAngelChelle Member
since 2001-12-06
Posts 87Kansas |
Dave, This was such a beautiful piece. I could feel the bittersweet angst flowing through each line. I've been to this very place before, and I know what it's like to have a broken, tired heart. But there's always an end to the pain, somwhere, somehow ... and that's what we always look forward to. It's hard to move on, but life doesn't stand still when you're hurting. I'm glad you shared this one. Thanks .P.S. I'm enjoying your use of faces again  .~What is cherished most is what must be the hardest fought for.~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Dave, this is wonderful..beautiful..pure poetry! *Happy Holidays* ~Hugs, Nancy~ *~ Wishing you all a magical Christmas ~* |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Marsha - I get the tea kettle on the stove right now. I can't believe you figured out the conspiracy about all of us trying to make you sob.  I guess we will have to come up with a new scheme. Maybe, laughter? Actually, that can lead to tears as well.  I will think of something. In the mean time, put those handcuffs on.Dave |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Keth - Now that I captured your heart my work is done here. Thanks for reading.Dave |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Michelle - I have worked long and hard to improve upon my placement of these faces. I am glad to see I am finally getting some recognition. Thanks for reading.    Dave  |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Nancy - Thanks for reading, and happy holidays to you as well. Dave |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Dave darling boy Okay you're on. This is an unashamed bump, I'm sure you realise that there's no self bump, a shame but never mind. (So I'll give you one kid..... No darling boy I meant a bump) I still say this is incredibly beautiful, you really do have such a wonderful way with words. Besides I want everyone to have a chance to see this, so I'm sending it back to the top. Now about that cuppa, Mmmmm I'll be over as soon as I can. Wonderful writing as always well done Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Marsha - Thanks for the bump, and I will be keeping the tea warm until you get here.lol Dave |
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