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Open Poetry #17

No Rhyme and Not 14 Lines

Son Netier
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since 2001-12-11

Posts 116
The Garden State

0 posted 2001-12-16 10:53 PM

What beauty to watch sunset turn the sky orange,
With pink delights brushing clouds,
With music softly playing in the background
While I watch stars come out with you in my arms.
Whispers of conversation,
Wishing for nothing more than this moment,
What fantasy is this but being
With you.

Bill
There is such a thing as open poetry, which I have seen done so well here and this is my attempt at it. Now I think I’ll return back to a form I am more comfortable with and turn back to Sonnets.

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

1 posted 2001-12-16 10:55 PM

just beautiful...helen

Startime
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since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

2 posted 2001-12-16 10:57 PM

As far as form goes you have done a wonderful job with this poem. I totally enjoyed reading this romantic beauty. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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