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I Wonder If It's Me?
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I Wonder If It's Me? |
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John Yaws Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 860Texas 
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I was looking at your pictures- The house, the yard, the trees- The flowerbeds were blooming Blossoms swaying in the breeze... The children smiled so sweetly- Their joy was plain to see... But I sense there's something missing, And I wonder if it's me? I can smell the coffee brewing, And bacon in the pan... I can see you brush a wayward lock Aside with your left hand... Your neck looks so enticing- Just begging for a kiss... The river bank for walking... I believe would be pure bliss. Again I look them over... There's an emptiness I see- An element is missing... And I wonder if it's me? [This message has been edited by John Yaws (edited 12-16-2001).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Probably. This is a poignant poem, John. I hope you have family around you for the holidays, or warm and generous friends. I wish you peace and happy days, always. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh John, I can feel such loneliness behind these words, my heart goes out to you! (sigh) I hope that you get to share some time with your loved ones this Christmas, for no one should ever be lonely during the holidays! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, your words are always so wonderful to read! (big huggsssss) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet John, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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misguided angel Member
since 2001-11-23
Posts 106Australia |
John, this is a touching write. Such a gentle longing. Andrea Summon the courage to step out of your familiar rut and suddenly many of those things which held you back will no longer have the power to do so. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
John, I can hear this as a country song, if it isn't already -- very marketable title and concept with nice rhyme and meter. -MVS "Your focus determines your reality." --Qui-Gon from The Phantom Menace |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Very beautiful poem. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
I am sure that at this time of the year we look around ourselves and question many things. My heart goes out to you, dear one. I hope you are surrounded by all the love that family can give you. **hugs**   Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
What a lovely poem with it's reflection and "what if" questioning. I do so enjoy your writing. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I echo Tracey in saying how much I love your writing. And, this does indeed sound like a country ballad. Enjoyed. Hugs, Nancy.  "A dream is a wish your heart makes..." |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
We all have to make our own decisions and follow our own paths in life as a result... I'd expect we all question the wisdom of those choices we made long ago... Your words are an exceptional exploration of these feelings, m'friend... |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
WoW!! Beautiful paint! |
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