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Yummy delicious bagel
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Yummy delicious bagel |
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Daemonyin Junior Member
since 2001-11-24
Posts 31 |
There's a destiny chosen by the stars dead inevitable, I must overcome. Life's predictable when I'm lazy; Humor the day, fade to gray, then I'm numb Oh, what is the consequence of defying you Destiny? When I get there I'll take it in strides. As of now.... I have yet to come through with my hopeful, strectched lies born from intentions to quench my soul Destiny's directing me I can't escape -I'm weak- this lonely gray vicinity. Prosaic sector; Devoid of musical entity. Like an unwaning cancer; The source of my soul's atrophy. And so alas, it is my "fate", being chained below I'm struggling to rise... Middle ground is as far as I can go. Though not as far as I can see. You'd think I'd strive as long as I have sight. But all light has vanished from tall cavern's eye. And I have not the strength or will required to climb. ....Okay, so this poem is obviously not about a delicious bagel.... I admit, I led you here under false pretenses. If you wish to provide me with a vengeful beating, I will permit it..... |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
now you went and made me hungry....LOL I'll forgive you the title this once  I enjoyed the write  very well done |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Very, very interesting. Playful false pretenses prove fantasy exists. HUH? How did you know I bought bagels today? I enjoyed this most unusual poem, especially this: "And so alas, it is my "fate", being chained below I'm struggling to rise... Middle ground is as far as I can go" |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Interesting poem..but why the lure with the false title? Do you think a catchy title is essential to draw a reader's eye? If you had to rename this piece, what would you call it? |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (giggles) OK, I will let you go on the title this once! (smiles) Such a wonderful poem about destiny and how fate is the challenge that we confront to fulfill it! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, I love it!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Daemonyin Junior Member
since 2001-11-24
Posts 31 |
To Poet deVine: I simply didn't feel like being serious, I was going to call it "fade to gray" or something like that... Its just that I don't consider titles to be of that much importance, and because the poems that I write never at all stray from "serious", I like to put something silly or stupid for the title..... Thankyou SEA, Thanks Midnitesun And Noah Eaton, I had no idea I was so loved, thanks for filling me in.... Ah, but you say that to everyone don't you? |
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