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You Are There, Here With Me (Lady In White's Challenge)
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You Are There, Here With Me (Lady In White's Challenge) |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada 
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You Are There, Here With Me Held in the vision of my mind, you are there, here with me Our distant spirits are entwined still apart we agree My heart begins to beat love’s song a timeless melody While in our souls we sing along you are there, here with me Sweet music flows over the miles, you are there, here with me Tender touch bringing secret smiles setting lonely hearts free Gentle words follow me each night into dreams where I flee Flames of passion can then excite, with you there, here with me Karen Torbiak 2001© Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. [This message has been edited by Startime (edited 12-12-2001).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
sounds as if someone has been biten by the love bug! This is wonderful, Karen. Kathleen (Kay) |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*giggling* don't I wish....no, dear one, this is just in response to the challenge. I still just dream. **hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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The Rusty Knight Member
since 2001-08-29
Posts 414Texas |
The challenge must have been to fan the flames under the fellas in passions and you did it oh so well. Dan |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Karen - This poem perfectly illustrates the beauty and wonder of women. It is soft, loving, and filled with so much promise. It is wonderful. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
such a special answer, so romantic...you did well on the challenge lady... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Held in the vision of my mind, you are there, here with me Our distant spirits are entwined still apart we agree =================================== very well done Karen... I love how you made the line repeat in each verse..this has wonderful cadence. Lady's phrase has inspired lovely work tonite. perfect poetic challenge response poetess Startime Its not like you to say sorry, |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Gentle words follow me each night into dreams where I flee Flames of passion can then excite, with you there, here with me" I LOVE this part!! It's poetic perfection my dear  Challenge very well met!! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Brilliant writing, Karen! You show your talent here, my girl  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Lady in White will approve, and applaud. Well done, Startime... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
this is beautifully done... regards, sudhir |
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Rogue24 Member
since 2001-12-01
Posts 111Ontario, Canada |
Startime: Your dreams will one day find you in the arms of such a loving man, and those dreams will come true! You are so passionate in your writing, I love it, the romance sparks with your words! HUGS  Ter Alone in the dark, through my thoughts comfort I do seek, through my words I find peace. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
This brings the form of "spirit" in the souls of all, Karen...very well done, and a remarkable write. Challenge well met! |
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