Open Poetry #17 |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
Your silence seems cold Yet your eyes, watchful eyes are floating with love. Thy words are but a few Yet enough for me, to feel your touch. Thy words like the wine to her suckers. Thy worries I wear on my sleeves. Thy sweetness is dessert to my lips. Sweet remembrance of liquior of mouth, Lovely toughts of cream of cakes join me with bird chords of your voice. Lovely I sit next to you, I tenderly touch your face. Would you be mine, If I be your sleeves? Would you be my cup of mouth? Lay down my head beside yours forever, waiting upon your answer... ~Flower lasts so an hour, yet spring will brings her back to life again. ~Just when I thought it is too far away, opportunity knocks the door [This message has been edited by aries_luv_ppl (edited 12-07-2001).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Soooooooo beautiful! I think "Cup Of Love" would be great! (smiles) Soooooo beautiful, sweet friend! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eliza, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
I like this. Interesting. |
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OWG Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 155California |
dug it huge...blend of willing and hungry..wanting and satisfied.. more than not enough |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
Cup of Love seems to be nice title indeed. Thanks, really. Thanks for reading my threads. ~Flower lasts so an hour, yet spring will brings her back to life again. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Love this...I suggest "Lovely Thoughts of Desire" for this is exactly what you have presented...James |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
I agree, Cup of Love sounds perfect! Neat poem! RP |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
well.. im not too sure.. Cup of Love sounds neat, but.. maybe you could title it. "I Feel You Within", or, "Together Forever".. i dunno.. i never really liked titles much, you know |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
A loving and lovely poem...how about calling it "Would You Be Mine?" copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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