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what the words make (another concrete poem)
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what the words make (another concrete poem) |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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thinkyou’lls about e whata e before shown w d pieceitright d y t ai ar of the n o othat i n e heart a u a t a isand framed world s m --------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 12-07-2001).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 YAY!!! I LOVE IT!!! (smiles) Isn't it just amazing what words can do and what we can create from each and every dream? (sigh) This is soooooooo beautiful, sweet John, I love it! (big hugggssssss) Your poems are always filled with magic! We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet John, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
well, honestly? I'd like to know what it all means but I'm just too tired today to figure it out! Kathleen (Kay) |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW!! Well done Sven!! This is amazing! Perhaps I shall give one a try sometime! Excellent!! Love it! ~hugs, Nancy~ "A dream is a wish your heart makes..." |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
ME, I agree with Nancy...this is great... jwesley |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
*jenn smacks you*  Okay..so umm..I got a lil jealousy bug for a half a second?  LOL! You definetely to this better than I. I'm having a bit of trouble putting together the words in the first letter and the third letter. If I want a headache this morning, I'll go beat my head against a wall, thanks! Really..I love this, John. My high school boyfriend wrote me a letter like this once. It wasn't a poem, but the words of the letter spelled out "I Love You" Thanks for bringing back a cute memory and writing something wonderful again. Your storm of assumption feeds anger I am calm enough to hold inside. Don't pretend to know me if you've never put stretched out your heart with since [This message has been edited by Temptress (edited 12-07-2001).] |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I'm not even trying this one Sven, I think I need to print it out and just work with one of these sometime and see what I can do. Looks like a challenge to me.......lmao...a big one!! You do write so wonderfully dear friend. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
I won't pretend that I understand what does this mean... It seems to need some real hard thinking to figure out.....Oh, I have so many things on my mind today... A clever one nonetheless..... Thank you ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
 this is Great...like it when you plays with words..((hugs)) Charisma ~*Theresia~* |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Seems to me you've been looking for a challenge Mr. Poemeister |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Your imagination puts us all to shame. What a remarkable little poem WEll done, Master LIz |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Not bad, Sven... it took me a while to get, too. Maybe next time you might consider using HTML colour codes to make the words more easily differentiated? Or were you trying to bust a brain vein on your reader?  |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Oh my gosh......BRAVO!!!!Talent...did someone say you have talent.....well I sure hope so...this poem is absolutely amazing. **big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Clever Sven, this time I was ready,so I did't cheat. Great poem. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
think about what a piece of the heart is and, you'll see it right before you framed and shown to a world that waits in a dream those are the words to the poem. . . and yes, it's a challenge to read, but that's what makes it fun. . . concrete poems are fun and challenging to do. . . once you get the shape that you're going to do in your head, it's easy to go from there. . . perhaps I'll do some more. . . and yes, Allan, perhaps I'll throw in some color this time. . . thank you all for your replies. . . I'm glad that you're enjoying this little trip into the more creative corners of my mind. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
I absolutely love this, Sven!! It's so creative and really takes a lot of talent. As usual..you have totally impressed this poetess. :-) |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Clever enjoyable write! I had to read it twice, but then it just seemed to jump out at me the second time. |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
John, I loved this poem! Although it hurt my eyes when i read it the first time. :-) Take Care, Laura |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Clever! |
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