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Nature Girl
Junior Member

since 2001-10-19

Posts 31

0 posted 2001-12-05 06:55 PM

She twists the words the way
her mother drove in
hard lesson after another

Only recently realized she
had mastered that trick of tone

And now, in the battle she’s devised,
thrusts a counter-attack to a war he’s not
yet aware of
she strikes him down and ends with a plea
blames her witty slices to insanity
and waits to watch him squirm

As always, it is a way to cut,
to make him feel the way she does:
just simple tool for empathy

it lets him know she never feels quite good enough
shows him just how unlovable she is
soothes the burning jealousy of every other girl he encounters
that could (rightfully) take her place

Because there has been pain,
she wants him to feel it
Because she has scars from this time with him,
she wants to tattoo the same to his heart...
so they might be the same, you see?

She bites and bares and wails at his heels
with the hope of conquering his radiance,
using nips of blame, abrasive,
to polsh her dull or scuff his shine
To make it even... to keep them at odds

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

1 posted 2001-12-05 07:02 PM

*sigh* I can only say that I feel sorry for her that she feels they must be even that way. My heart goes out to you. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

2 posted 2001-12-05 07:04 PM

God, sounds like some kind of a she-devil

yikes!

Kathleen (Kay)
"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Mon Cherie

Senior Member

since 2001-10-31

Posts 922
Land of Never-ending Summers

3 posted 2001-12-05 07:06 PM

This is so sad... She's hurt, yet the only way to vent her frustration is to hurt another person, who probably deserved it

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

4 posted 2001-12-05 07:07 PM

There is plenty of pain wrapped up in this poem. Doesn't it feel good to let it out?
It's a shame we sometimes learn hurting more readily than loving techniques.
Good reflective searching, Nature Girl.
Honest and candid.

Nature Girl
Junior Member

since 2001-10-19

Posts 31

5 posted 2001-12-06 01:18 AM

MidniteSun, that is it exactly. Thank you.

Robert A
Member

since 2001-10-29

Posts 174

6 posted 2001-12-06 10:56 AM

man, this is angst.

RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

7 posted 2001-12-06 11:39 AM

I enjoyed this description of deceptive-obsessive codependence. A sort of water seeks it's own level....or else.

"Happy people have no history" - French Proverb

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

8 posted 2001-12-06 05:16 PM

So beautifully said, Nature Girl......
but it just makes me want to WRING that lady's jealous neck..

Lyra

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Nature Girl
Junior Member

since 2001-10-19

Posts 31

9 posted 2001-12-06 07:28 PM

What passionate responses! I never expected such a torrent...

Or, really, such judgment; makes me think about each and every one of ya ... hmmmmmm

Thank you for your fire and/or understanding. I love dynamic reactions!

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