Bless this Mess .................. Marges Challenge

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Open Poetry #17

Bless this Mess .................. Marges Challenge

Rex Allen McCoy
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since 2000-01-30

Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London

0 posted 2001-12-04 11:30 PM

Bless this Mess
~~~
A continuous sneeze
soaked right to the knees
dry me off
but oh please
never ever
refuse to hug me
~
You been scrubbin this floor
for six weeks or more
took me less
time before
to keep
this dang face tidy
~
You don't never sigh
when most people cry
and scream
at your guy
to wrap
his head in a baggy
~
Six mops in the kitchen
lets eat out
quit the *****in
There must
be some place
that'll serve us
~
The napkins are drippin
the table is swimmin
in spite
o' my nose
we did
finish the chicken?
~
Oh the waitress is blind
she must be
she's kind
then the bikers
beside
went to leave
~
Lost their lunch
the whole bunch
on our table
at once
walked away
but laughed back
with a cry
~
Hey buddy!
How Long Did It Take You To Get That Ugly ?
~
You should know
was my sigh
buttin in
to this lie
next time
you might try
keep your comments
confined
with the flow
~~~

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2001-12-05 12:02 PM

Now that is one ugly mess! Where is my giant box of tissues? Get the hose out, forget the mop.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2001-12-06 01:27 AM

Rex~
Well the first thing to be 'mopped up' will be those *****'s~
LOL ... you've got a wonderful sense of humor~
Thanks for participating~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-12-06 04:51 PM

I think they'd let the asterixed word slide if you just wrote it as it was.

Well Rex, I definitely enjoyed this piece a lot... very playful tone, creative and with a simple concept, but written in a manner that keeps it from being boring or redundant.

You wrote this very well, and it was a joy to peruse.

~Allan

"I know it's nice to be known - It caresses your ego - but the society cost is terrible."
~Vangelis

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