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Sentimental Shakedown (to marge)
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Sentimental Shakedown (to marge) |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever 
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"Yeah yeah, I'm feeble and weak, and yeah yeah I have no inspiration", My mind just 'aint a' workin' too good. I guess I'm what they call "a disgusting human being", and a male one, at that. So here I am with my thoughtless bliss, with my ciggarettes and my laziness, My hours of lounging, staring mindlessly at the television sceen. Here I am, for you to read. Here is the reality of who I am, no frills attached, baby. Here I am, with my beer. Here I am, drunk on the side of your road of dreams, Subject to a sentimental shakedown. I dont think you're goind to find anything at the moment, baby. I admit, I dont have ANY inspiration or ambition to do ANYTHING, officer, but tell ya what, One day, I'll meet that girl of my dreams, and all of these poems you read of mine, will be so beautiful. You wait and see, Marge. |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
ummm.. this poem sucks, man. what were you thinking.. how bout coming up with something a little more creative, you lazy, stupid low-life. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Well now, didn't Marges challenge just bring out the best in you!!!! I like this, probably a lot different than anyone else would have done with the title, but I really like it If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
And hey, did you see that fellow up there calling you a low life??? Looks like a fight's gonna break out!!! Lol If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
yea... what nerve.. last time I say anything good about any of HIS poems!! lol!! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Joseph, never say that, your words are always so important and special to us all! You will find your dream girl very soon, and you will write very happy words, but until then, always believe in yourself, and reach down to the inner-beauty of your dreams and write how you feel down, what makes you happy! (sigh) My heart is always with you, sweet friend, know you are loved by many like I do! (big hugggssssss) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Joseph, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
My congratulations sir, you tell it like it is, more power to your pen. I enjoyed it, thanks for sharing. Regards, Olias. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
LOL! Gotta love this style. Don't listen to that jerk up there. This is good stuff!!  |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
This is great. Peaches |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
That is quite a shakedown, shaking the poor soul all the way down to the low-life level. LOL though, it does show a surviving sense of humor in there. |
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