Open Poetry #17 |
Whispers of Dawn (Marge's Challenge) |
Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Lost in the memory of you I stand silently screaming Your voice in my head Softly calling, In you, I am so lost I lay weeping I feel silence Deep inside me My soul echoes My heart aches Where traces of you remain, The rain falling, my tears In shades of midnight I write to you by candlelight as you Lay sleeping, I can no longer hear Your sweet slumber, but I know you are there I feel your warmth, your breathing still Guides me to the haven of my Dreams among the stars I love you for the passion I feel when I close my eyes, for the inspiration of your Beauty, for the colors I use to Paint our canvas of gathered time In vibrant colors Walking in summertime, Gently falling snows of winter, Autumn leaves blowing Time is all I have in These Whispers of dawn, Your calming peace renews my heart, Where again we Dance in salvation Time is still ~~~~~ I keep my ideals, because in spite of everything, I still believe that people are really good at heart. Anne Frank 09*12*01 [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 12-01-2001).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Greeneyes, Enjoyed the read. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh Lauren! This is beautiful...exquisite. Soft and haunting...WOW! Very well done and enjoyed! ~hugs, Nancy~ "A dream is a wish your heart makes..." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Lost in the memory of you I stand silently screaming Your voice in my head Softly calling, In you, I am so lost I lay weeping I feel silence Deep inside me My soul echoes My heart aches Where traces of you remain, The rain falling, my tears In shades of midnight I write to you by candlelight as you Lay sleeping, I can no longer hear Your sweet slumber, but I know you are there I feel your warmth, your breathing still Guides me to the haven of my Dreams among the stars I love you for the passion I feel when I close my eyes, for the inspiration of your Beauty, for the colors I use to Paint our canvas of gathered time ========================================== SIGH Oh Im sooo glad Im not Marge cuz I couldnt pick... so I'll just say we have winner on them all OK..yeah Im butterfly biased on this one *S* he said ... "dont cry" ... said "it only hurts forever ... and all we have is time." ~Tabitha's Secret~ [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 12-01-2001).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Oh Lauren, this is sooooooooo beautiful and sweet! (sigh) You always express love and emotions soooooooo enchantingly! (smiles) I love it!!! (kiss on cheek) You are soooooo romantic, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* a poetic delight that comes straight from the heart. Such whispers that touch your heart. Absolutely beautiful. I love it. **hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Beautifully done! I love reading your work! Your storm of assumption feeds anger I am calm enough to hold inside. Don't pretend to know me if you've never put stretched out your heart with since |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
"Time is all I have...in These Whispers of Dawn". WOW! How deeply meaningful. Really enjoyed this my friend. jwesley |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - I love reading your writings, romantic they are... BC |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Your words float on the whisper of dawn with greeneyes smiling a lovely song Very nicely done, Greeneyes! I'm just glad I'm not the one to pick from all of these poetic submissions. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
pssst .... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ WOW ! Inspiration flits through with beauty and delicacy~ Thank you soooooooo much~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Lauren, simply stunning, my friend. I've never done a challenge. Perhaps I'll look in to it. *hugs* Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Soooooo soft and lovely, Greeneyes! Well done! |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Incredibly well done! Enchanting in a way Love it! Hugs Cindi God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Seymour Tabin~ thank you for peeking in I appreciate your time in reading... ~~ Nancy~ Thankyou my friend...I appreciate you much....HUGS... ~~ Janet Marie~ sweet friend....thank you always for your replies....they mean more to me then you know..... ~~ Noah~ I just love your responses....thank you so much for always being so kind.... ~~ Startime~ Thankyou my friend....from the heart always.... HUGS... ~~ Jen~ I love reading yours...thank you my friend....HUGS to you.... ~~ jwesley~ I appreciate your thoughts, thak you very much.... ~~ Bill Charles~ as are your my friend....thank you for taking your time to read... ~~ Midnitesun~ Me too....*L* thank you my friend....HUGS to you.... ~~ ctowen~ PSSSTTTT....thank you....look for that rain... its wonderful...appreciate you... ~~ Marge~ thank you for the inspiration hugs to you my friend, heading your way shortly...(FLA) woohooooooo.....HUGS to you... ~~ Michael~ ~~ Denise and Cindi~ Thank you for reading and taking your time to leave your comments... HUGS..... all.....on the way.... Greeneyes~ [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 12-03-2001).] |
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PoetriPrincess Member
since 2001-11-17
Posts 55CA / U.S.A |
This is very Pretty, Greeneyes while reading this I could imagine laying on the grass at night looking up at the stars. Truely nice Muse. A Musician must make his Music, |
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PoetriPrincess Member
since 2001-11-17
Posts 55CA / U.S.A |
OH YEAH, " What was Marge's Challenge???" [This message has been edited by PoetriPrincess (edited 12-03-2001).] |
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