Open Poetry #17 |
Cherokee Maiden's Tears |
Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Cherokee Maiden's Tears Glistening, gleaming, long black braids streaming down her slender back bronzed blade of disrobed shoulder where she carries her knapsack to cool pooled water's shore to sit, to hold in limbo, trust, there willow whispers nevermore tears shed from shamed disgust quit herself of native camp, distanced she from warmer fire maiden Cherokee thereby sought to drown fierce and inner desire to sooth wearied nerves and then to purge away the thought of him O she the maiden Cherokee sought to fight this, the love he brought White Man, a terrible plight ravaged her heart this very night blues eyes spiked her eyes of coal spears thrust to her very soul sought she by cool pool's shore to douse this lust forevermore willow whispers nevermore but fire ravaged her very core slipping into water's abyss fevered dreams brought no bliss mind rampant of White Man's kiss no good could come of this Mother, Father would then decline to call on Spirits of Indian kind to shed their daughter of this descent into Hell's gate she was bent Cherokee Maiden's tears then fell into the pool and there still dwell for maiden, she gave up to him and in dark of night, they still swim under caliginous sky and pool's haven meet the White Man and Cherokee maiden there circles can be seen on pond where their love lives on and on. ©Karilea Rilling Jungel 10 September 2000 revised 29 November 2001 ~ Dedicated to Marge Tindal ~ ~who has been more than a friend~ ~a kindred spirit and special soulmate~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh Karilea! Now you just KNOW I love this! I am so pleased you brought this back as I missed it before. What a sad but beautiful tale of forbidden love this is. Thoroughly enjoyed this afternoon. ~hugs, Nancy~ "A dream is a wish your heart makes..." |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--I don't think i've read this..it's wonderful!! The love story, a classic, and the writing, pure poetic grace. Thank you for reposting it! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
What a beautiful poem of true love. And it's a nice tribute for Marge, who really is a very special soul. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"quit herself of native camp, distanced she from warmer fire maiden Cherokee thereby sought to drown fierce and inner desire to sooth wearied nerves and then to purge away the thought of him O she the maiden Cherokee sought to fight this, the love he brought" stunning... what a wonderful tribute to an angel you rock |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Terrific write K. Mucho Applause from me. jwesley |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetKarilea~ You just know ... and for that I thank the spirits for your love and friendship~ This is so beautifully written ... thank you, my friend~ *Hugs* ~*WillowWhiteFeather*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Oh my gosh, this was so sad but my heart rejoiced in the end to feel the spirit of the Cherokee live on! (smiles) Most of my family ancestry is Cherokee Indian too, and I love all the tales I read! (smiles) I just know Marge will cherish this always, for she is such a beautiful loving friend like you! (kiss on cheek) I LOVE IT!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
What a beautiful tribute.I know Marge will love this.You have done it once again. Peaches |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed reading this Sunshine...James |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
I like alot, excellent. Regards, Olias. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
This is very well written, karilea. The mood stays the samethroughout the poem. I like the way you didn't tell the whole story in just one verse, but built it out of all the verses. Great work here. It shows a lot of depth and intelligence in the way you approach your writing. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
I enjoyed the read over and over, beautiful Karilea.....more than beautiful! ((hugs)) *thread to library* |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well if this wasn't the most beautiful dedication and to to Marge most fittingly too! This was beautiful - so beautiful in fact, I didn't even leave you a picture for this one, as it speaks more artistically than I could find. Just lovely Karilea. (took it - lol) I really have to find time to get into the archives. ~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~ |
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