Getting Out and Back - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2001-11-29 07:05 AM

Cold coffee and pale stale toast,
Warm orange juice and last week’s roast,
Appetite?
No reason remains to stay
No reason to be away,
Nothings right,
But nothing is really wrong,
Feeling that I don’t belong.

Flannel shirt of patchwork blue,
Jeans that have a hole or two,
A bit worn,
Shoes that let the water in,
Now that’s it started raining,
A light storm,
Drenching since I still sit there,
Soaked but I don’t really care.

Wandering with tapping cane,
No one knows I left or came,
Ignored,
Nothing for a thief to steal,
Barely here and barely real,
No reward,
No present of presence found,
No home just to a house bound.

Gloom

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2001-11-29 07:23 AM

"Barely here and barely real,"

Nobody writes depression better than you, Professor. And I can relate, unfortunately to the above quote. Written with your usual grace with attention to detail. Enjoyed.

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

2 posted 2001-11-29 07:33 AM

Good story, almost disguising the 7/3 syl count because it flowed so well.

Enjoyed.

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

3 posted 2001-11-29 10:00 AM

Shoot this is good and it made me cry with sorrow for the one it is written about. How incredibly sad and you bring it to life making me see it is also reality. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

4 posted 2001-11-29 10:22 AM

Thank you, Serenity,
You praise me highly with your kind words,
And whom else would you expect better on depression,
I know all it’s phases, all it’s twists back down,
And where the bottom is ~
Easy to recognize when it smacks you in the soul.

Thank you, MFFF
I do try to keep the flow, especially when in one of my
Favorite forms.
Glad you liked it.

Thank you, Startime,
Glad I could make you feel,
Any emotion is better than none,
Which I know all too well.

Gloom

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

5 posted 2001-11-29 10:23 AM

Sky tears reigning here
Wondering I, whence it came
What's in a name (just a rhyming game)
I place in blue frame
No one knows, but sometimes fear
Ignored, (I think not)
No reward
No present of presence found,
For today, soon, I am outward bound.

Guess I myst you this morn...sighing sweetly

M

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart.
It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul."
(J.Garland)

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

6 posted 2001-11-30 03:27 AM

Oh how I feel this one.... the desperation of all for not, invisable... lost hopes and dreams, nothing matters...
~Connie~

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

7 posted 2001-11-30 09:31 AM

Thank You, Nakdthoughts,
For the wonderful rhyming play response.

Thank you, Zinsser,
Make another feel the words is high praise.

Gloom

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

8 posted 2001-11-30 10:48 PM

Wow, you have written my feelings from a couple of days back. I was in a blue, blue mood and wish I could have read it then. I snapped out of it the next day...hope you did too.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

9 posted 2001-12-01 07:41 AM

Thank you, Tracey
I am pleased you liked it,
This is always my mood, blue.

Gloom

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.