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Open Poetry #16

... a slow day ...

Topheth
Member

since 2001-09-08

Posts 297
Texas

0 posted 2001-10-05 06:05 PM

'Sweet Inspiration'

My words
are soft
and distant clouds
to be condensed
for meaning,
wiped away
like a mist,
as dew upon the vivid bloom
of flower.

I cannot speak with force,
am constantly blown
by the winds
of emotion,
helpless as petals
upon the waves.

I need a rock,
need a hold,
need a love, strong and bold.

[This message has been edited by Topheth (edited 10-05-2001).]

Kit McCallum

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Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

1 posted 2001-10-05 06:35 PM

"am constantly blown
by the winds
of emotion,
helpless as petals
upon the waves."

Beautiful flow and phrasing within this lovely verse Topheth! A delicate rendering of tender thoughts ... very much enjoyed!

Best wishes,
/Kit

[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 10-05-2001).]

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2001-10-05 06:53 PM

wow.....very nice

very tender

very big brown eyes......oops

easy to get sidetracked..........

Dee
Member Elite

since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

3 posted 2001-10-06 06:44 PM

Very nicely done Topheth. Your phrases are wonderful. I love it.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2001-10-06 06:52 PM

I agree with Susan...very nice

very tender

...very big brown eyes, oops,

Tell me to behave Jeph

Good write....you know I enjoyed it!
~hugs, Nancy~
Spice?? What is that?

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

rwood
Member Elite

since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

5 posted 2001-10-08 07:09 AM

Very nice flow. I enjoyed each line. Refreshing imagery as well...the poem dear Sir. As you are taking hold of some of our poetesses! We have a fine appreciation for all things lovely. Wonderful verse.

Sincerely,
Regina

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