Open Poetry #16 |
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Notebook Stuff # 1 |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL ![]() |
Traveler Ending There was a tremor of hope along a road of solitude But she moved too fast. She scared it away. The path grew long, her feet calloused Her mind turned to the peace of things passing by And her love drifted just along beside her. It drifted in her blind spot. She thought it had abandoned her. Now she remains cursed by her blind spot. Won't you take her heart and pry it open? The dust of years lies thickly, Blocking the once vibrant light. There was a tremor of hope along a blind spot in the road of solitude. She went looking for it. It had been hers all along. Don't gain my affections then cover my eyes. Don't sweep me off my feet then fail to catch me before I hit the floor. |
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Sven![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
you know. . . it's amazing what can come out of our minds when we're not trying. . . great job. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Moonlight Romeo![]() ![]()
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
I have a notebook like this. Perhaps I should go into it more. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Notebook stuff is good stuff indeed... ![]() |
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Suzanne Arlene Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377Ontario, Canada |
Oh i liked that. It makes me look at my blindspot lol. Is something there i did not see before .hmmmmm ![]() |
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Pip Member
since 2001-09-14
Posts 59 |
Found yer notebook did ya? LOL! LOL! LOL! I know a secret, and I think it's funny..... |
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Masked Intruder![]() ![]()
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Jenn, I do believe I love this poem! I absolutely adore the images it created and the places it took me! My favorite line: "It drifted in her blind spot. She thought it had abandoned her." This thought stands out and will stick with me, very much so! Great write! You can't wake a person who is pretending to be asleep. -- Navajo Proverb |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This was very much enjoyed tonight...thank you!! ~Time has cast a spell on you |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Temptress...I really like this. I can't pick a line that I like better than the others. It all fit together perfectly alan |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Thank God for those roadside rest areas. Enjoyed. |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
TemptyOne~ 'Her mind turned to the peace of things passing by And her love drifted just along beside her.' I enjoyed the thoughts in these lines~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Jenn, your notebook must be amazing. Mine just ends up being full of to do lists and stuff. I really enjoyed this, a powerful peice. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Auguste![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Jennifer, Your writing always fascinates me. Nice work! Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Apachecat906 Member
since 2001-09-04
Posts 217Michigan, USA |
Her mind turned to the peace of things passing by And her love drifted just along beside her. It drifted in her blind spot. She thought it had abandoned her. ======= This part was absolutley great..very thought provoking. I wish you would post more from your notebook, if this is the kind of "scribblings" you are inclined to put in there! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Temptress- Much enjoyed these thoughts. Nicely done. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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